Revision or page-one rewrite?
I'll be in with a page-one.
Without going into too much detail of my proposal/treatment, let's just say there are aspects of Rob's 1st script that I think should come back in a 3rd draft, as well as a few things I want to change entirely. So in a way, I guess mine's a page-one rewrite... but it revisits things from all previous scripts.
I'm throwing my hat into this as well, a page one rewrite as well.
I hadn’t plans to attempt this story as I liked both versions, but an idea popped into my head ( page one rewrite) today and I may run with it. If nothing else, I will get more submission practice -- If the deadline hasn’t passed.
Okay, deadline hasn't passed -- May 14. However, after reading the entry rules again, I am wondering if I can put together all new characters (I make them up as I write) in time. Twelve princesses, 12 guys, 4 nannies, antagonist? Oh well, I have until May 14…
woah... really, Raph? You ARE doing a total overhaul! lol
I also opted for a page one rewrite. Submitted my proposal last weekend.
I'm going with what Amazon said they wanted in place and re-writing the entire script with my own ideas.... at least my idea of the script in treatment form, then if they want it the entire script.
I didn't think I would enjoy doing this but it's turned out in my notes into something I will pursue on my own if I have to. Never done this type story before, but after putting some thought in to it, I kind of like it.
The tone of the story is immediate... it reminded me of 'Tangled' and 'Shrek'.
Very nice songs.
As I read... I could hear Kursten Dunst singing from page to page.
(Check out the teen romp 'Get Over it' for an example of this.)
I'll in! I'll submit a proposal. I bet this script was bounced off Disney; or should have been.
I'm in -- not "I'll in"
I'm going a bit Duh!
Kirsten Dunst - Dream Of Me
This film could rock live-action. I think it's the harder of the two to write. I'll have a crack at it :-)
I believe that anyone that really wants this would do a page one rewrite. Nothing against Rob's script, but if it was what the studio wanted, then we wouldn't be talking. When you read the studio notes, it's actually asking for a complete overhaul. At least that's what I read into it.
Live-action starts with trimming down the cast with a scythe.
I feel an animated film may have a a lot of dead-wood characters floating around -- just because one wouldn't risk deviating from the original script.
Me too. My proposal for "Twelve Princesses And A Peasant With A Broad Axe" is almost ready to go.
See Sven The AxeMan strike a blow for economic democracy with his mighty axe. And you will learn why they call it a "Broad Axe" if you catch my drift.
Speaking of dead-wood characters, just wait till Sven goes to work.
I read through some different versions of the story and most of them had the protagonist as a young man returning from the war, not as a farm boy. I felt the script was inadquate.... It was basically the cut and paste by the book fairy tale story, for a lot of it anways. Which is ways I suppose could be good...a lot of wiggle room!
Don't mean to insult the writer in any manner! Just putting a thought out there.
I have already put my proposal in. The dramatical structure differs from the script, because I develop it out of the new characterisations of the princesses.
I think I'm taking this a completely different direction: 12 Princes. I'm worried that too many extras "s"es and "e"s will confuse people. And it will be a sci-fi flick, that takes place in a subterranean Studio-57-like disco and donut shop. I'm so onto something....where's my crayon...
Joking aside, I think a page one is needed.
So, how many people entered?
Revision. There's a lot of solid elements here, and I'm not gonna totally reimagine a script for $10,000.
I guess only Amazon knows. If you're a damn good writer, this seems like a good opportunity.
I entered! keeping my fingers crossed...
Stupid question: I didn't see them ASK for a page one rewrite. Are you doing it, anyway?
"All we ask is that your movie has a budding young romance at its center, a hero’s journey, and 12 princesses."
Sounds like they're open to page 1 rewrites.
I am basically doing a page 1 rewrite. The characters have the same names, but I'm changing the villains and the plot pretty thoroughly. I still have a romance, a hero's journey, and 12 princesses, though, so hopefully people will be happy with it.
Like Faith, I thought it was interesting that this screenplay took so many aspects from the well-known picture books (by Ruth Sanderson and Marianna Mayer), and it was recognizable due to the fact that they are clear departures from the original story that are (were) unique to those particular picture books.