Is there a better way or a way that I just not have found to get people to read your script, the premise wars does not seem to help as mine barely ever comes up, but it has got over 50% at least lol. And if a script is at the back of the list, seems like it will never be found. If I am missing something please let me know.
2. Pay them
3. Write a very compelling logline and pimp it on the board
your logline is boring.
and your story needs to be as good as Leaving Las Vegas. did you read the script?
I dont know what else to do to make the log line better, I am new at this, not a professional, if I was I might not be here. As for the story I think its good, but that is a matter of opinion.
Before submitting their script to the public, new screenwriters can learn much from this link:
Helps weed out beginner mistakes.
"I dont know what else to do to make the log line better, "
Google around and read some books. There are a lot of resources out there.
I recommend "Selling Your Story in 60 Seconds"
Browse around this forum.
There could be some helpful tips there.
@ Jeffrey (here's my take on your story)
RED OR DEAD
A life of excess has a CROUPIER in a precarious position where he has everything to lose.
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@Jeffrey R Theisler
1. Write 50 one sentence loglines.
2. Pick the one(s) with least characters. If there are more than 1, the one you can pronounce off the bat is the one you want.
3. Wait for 3 days.
4. Say it aloud without reading it. If it stuck (you can remember it), than it's good.
If it didn't stick, rinse and repeat.
Paying them is probably the only way to guarantee feedback.
who downloaded my BF script?
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Google "how to write a logline" and you will come up with a lot of helpful information on how to construct a logline. Dont let the variety of logline formulas confuse you.
Your logline has some major parts missing, like the engine and transmission.
What is your heros goal and what is at stake?
Also try and throw in some compelling action like Tim is head of security and his new mistress is a card counter ... I dont know what the compelling action might be because I havent read the script but you get the point.
And the dark path of gambling, drugs, alcohol and women sounds like fun to me ... well 3 out of 4. Women are a pain in the ass.
Sorry ladies :-(
Lauri's idea of pimpin' on the boards is a good one.
I've used the boards pretty much from the get-go on day three of AS existence. [http://studios.amazon.com/scripts/20867]
I typically -- in a most humble and gracious nature, almost wispy in its subtlety -- invite people here to read and comment on my screenplay. [http://studios.amazon.com/scripts/20867]
I like the story a lot [http://studios.amazon.com/scripts/20867] and I'm always eager to share my unique plot with others. [http://studios.amazon.com/scripts/20867]
So, if you'd like to read a truly offbeat story, [http://studios.amazon.com/scripts/20867], with really strange characters [http://studios.amazon.com/scripts/20867], I occasionally in the softest manner, recommend "Flat Pennies." [http://studios.amazon.com/scripts/20867]
Here's the link if you're interested...
Thank you so much! Much appreciated for the downloads! Almost at 500 thanks to the writers here.
Jeffrey - "Is there a better way or a way that I just not have found to get people to read your script..."
Show 'em your boobs.
What? It's always worked for me. Plus they're in a very good mood when they read your script. Win-win.
And don't try and play the boy card, Jeff. A nipple's a nipple, whether it's fully functional or for ornamental purposes only.
If you're gonna show off your man boobs, you better look like the Old Spice guy....
Robert, how in the world did you get 500 downloads?
It's a good 'story' = why not download my last revision and see... ;-0
nick -- you gotta pay attention. robert ward is the biggest pimp here. he's been pimping since day 1.... not that there's anything wrong with that. ;)
Nick... Jamster and Lisa are both right.
And by my rough calculations, I've gotten about 220 downloads through creative marketing... ah...er... eh, pimping of "Flat Pennies" while the ScriptShadow review brought in about 270 downloads.
I used to be on the boards a lot back in the day. Every little bit helps when it comes to getting yourself and your script out there. A download here, a download there. Helps to work the boards though.
Like when a year and a half ago, I was on vacation back home in Santa Cruz, California, and returned to my cabin at 1:45 a.m. after heavy drinking and I engaged a couple sock puppets of good ol' Auditorz.
Why? Because I wanted to talk about how cool "Flat Pennies" is while they wanted to talk about how shitty "Flat Pennies" is. I'm always up for a good debate.
My many years as a journalist and even as a columnist (where letter writers continually demanded my head on a flaming stick) toughened me up to engage others on bulletin boards to the point where I have the thick skin of a reptile.
Oh, and as Indigo suggested, I do pop out a nip now and then.
Ok, just off the synopsis, this could be a really cool story (or at least I think it could be), if you work it right. Kind of like OCEANS 47 or whatever they're up to now, except it actually happened. As for a logline, try this:
SOME KIND OF LUCK is the true story of a man who's in way too deep with the sharks and the bookies, and what happens when he tries to fix it all with one last score.
P.S.: Yes, I changed the title, and you should too. The one you have now (THRILL OF THE GAME or something) sounds like a basketball movie, or one of those cheesy come-from-behind Olympics straight-to-TV things. lol