Illimani says:
Hi there,
Good job, you sure deserved to get your project picked by Amazon. I've some suggestions though and they turn around Mort's suicide. It's a core issue, but it was too fast. I would have liked to see Mort struggling more. Personally I would have make his discomfort about his mother not being there to decide more complex, when finally he decides to sleep on his stomach, dying of crib death (in hell they would consider it "technically" a suicide because he was aware that it would result in death). I would love to submit my input directly to your script if you are open to it. Just warn me if that's the case so I can request your permission on the project collaboration tab.
Good job, you sure deserved to get your project picked by Amazon. I've some suggestions though and they turn around Mort's suicide. It's a core issue, but it was too fast. I would have liked to see Mort struggling more. Personally I would have make his discomfort about his mother not being there to decide more complex, when finally he decides to sleep on his stomach, dying of crib death (in hell they would consider it "technically" a suicide because he was aware that it would result in death). I would love to submit my input directly to your script if you are open to it. Just warn me if that's the case so I can request your permission on the project collaboration tab.