Creative Notes:
Page 1 rewrite - with Karen the protagonist instead of Richard.
THE ANSWER
RICHARD LOWMAN and his children have to wait a week to find out if an exorcism was successful.
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Synopsis:
THE ANSWER is about RICHARD LOWMAN and his three children, KAREN, RJ and LUCILLE, who have to wait a week to find out if an exorcism has been successful. The priest who has conducted it – FATHER COUGHLIN - tells them to just sit tight and wait. But he also tells Richard that regardless of the results he doesn’t want anything to do with his family. He doesn’t want to come back to the Lowman farmhouse anymore.
The whole town seems to also share that view. Although only two other people saw the exorcism of Lucille Lowman, everybody else declares the Lowmans a pariah family. Even the only psychiatrist in town is not willing to give eight year old Lucille Lowman post traumatic stress counseling.
However, even though the whole town is not willing to associate themselves with the Lowmans they are willing to turn a blind eye on a shooting that took place up there during the exorcism. Everybody knows that the shooting claimed one life. But the town has decided to adopt a “don’t ask don’t tell policy”, and everyone is acting like they don’t know about it.
However, barely a day after the exorcism, one of the two witnesses that were present, ROB ELLIS blows his brains out. Sheriff A.P. MORGAN, who was willing to turn a blind eye on the shooting at the Lowmans and the whole exorcism incident, has no choice now but to question what actually transpired at the Lowmans. And Rob Ellis seems to have been Father Coughlin’s camera man.
Meanwhile, at the Lowman farmhouse, strange things are happening. Although Lucille is now eating and talking, her behavior still leaves everybody questioning if the exorcism was successful. Everybody is waiting for an answer, especially, to the question – if the exorcism wasn’t successful, what are we going to do?
The whole town seems to also share that view. Although only two other people saw the exorcism of Lucille Lowman, everybody else declares the Lowmans a pariah family. Even the only psychiatrist in town is not willing to give eight year old Lucille Lowman post traumatic stress counseling.
However, even though the whole town is not willing to associate themselves with the Lowmans they are willing to turn a blind eye on a shooting that took place up there during the exorcism. Everybody knows that the shooting claimed one life. But the town has decided to adopt a “don’t ask don’t tell policy”, and everyone is acting like they don’t know about it.
However, barely a day after the exorcism, one of the two witnesses that were present, ROB ELLIS blows his brains out. Sheriff A.P. MORGAN, who was willing to turn a blind eye on the shooting at the Lowmans and the whole exorcism incident, has no choice now but to question what actually transpired at the Lowmans. And Rob Ellis seems to have been Father Coughlin’s camera man.
Meanwhile, at the Lowman farmhouse, strange things are happening. Although Lucille is now eating and talking, her behavior still leaves everybody questioning if the exorcism was successful. Everybody is waiting for an answer, especially, to the question – if the exorcism wasn’t successful, what are we going to do?
Latest Work
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Script 10 - Tungamirai's 9th Draft09/24/12
All Work
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Script 9 - Tungamirai's 8th Draft04/16/12Creative Notes:I removed the opening scene and made some minor changes to the plot.
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Script 8 - Jamster's 1st Draft12/26/11
Creative Notes:I concentrated on the dialogue as I found it in need of the most work of TM's otherwise excellent SP and made it more naturalistic, less stilted and on the nose.
I also improved the flow of scenes, character development and made it less passive.
And at 99 (-6) pages it feels a better, faster and cleaner read.
I hope you enjoy, and look forward to any feedback that you may have - Jim. -
Script 7 - Tungamirai's 7th Draft11/28/11Creative Notes:Cut down the page count from 115 to 105. Rewrote the seond act and removed a number of scenes that were slowing it down. A number of scenes have also been removed from the first act. FATHER COUGHLIN is now FATHER LOWMAN - Richard's older brother. This helps in clarifying a number of things in the last act.
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Script 6 - Tungamirai's 6th Draft09/30/11Creative Notes:I have changed the story to now focus on Richard Lowman. It's now a story about a father who has to protect his kids. I have taken out a number of scenes and brought in new ones. I have also brought in new characters.
A lot of this is based on AS notes. -
Script 5 - Tungamirai's 5th Draft09/30/11Creative Notes:This version now focuses on Richard Lowman as opposed to the entire family. It's now a story about a faher who has to protect his kids. A number of scenes have been taken out, new ones have been written and some new characters have also been brought in.
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Script 4 - Tungamirai's 4th Draft06/28/11Creative Notes:I broke up the action lines and answered some of the unaswered questions in the first act. It should flow more smoothely now.
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Script 3 - Tungamirai's 3rd Draft05/31/11Creative Notes:I rewrote the scene in which Mrs Lowman is possessed and all the other scenes that are directly related to it.
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Script 2 - Tungamirai's 2nd Draft03/07/11
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Script 1 - Tungamirai's Original Draft12/31/10