Great job! I was sold on this project when I read the previous version and I liked what you did with this one. As I said in another comment, I am more willing to accept the spectacle at the end because of what was added. A dimly lit nightclub table to a color charged, synchronized dance scene would be like a roller coaster ride for the viewer. I would want that white bell-bottomed suit to glow in that scene.
After reading this version, I am wondering if a couple of subtle hints about the identities of the three might be helpful. Nothing to bang the viewer over the head but make them look back and say "Heeey, yeah..."
I hope more writers read and review this project. As others have mentioned, a movie about writing might be a tough sell, especially a comedy. (Usually, most people can agree on what drama is but comedy? Thats's a different story) It seems writers always want to know the "why?" and, to me anyway, "why" isn't that important in comedy.
This script is a winner. It's well crafted and it's easy to see your heart is in it.
After reading this version, I am wondering if a couple of subtle hints about the identities of the three might be helpful. Nothing to bang the viewer over the head but make them look back and say "Heeey, yeah..."
I hope more writers read and review this project. As others have mentioned, a movie about writing might be a tough sell, especially a comedy. (Usually, most people can agree on what drama is but comedy? Thats's a different story) It seems writers always want to know the "why?" and, to me anyway, "why" isn't that important in comedy.
This script is a winner. It's well crafted and it's easy to see your heart is in it.