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fix the damn formatting
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Original, fun and very well done.
Very engaging from the first page to the closing credits. The story and author are very comfortable in the superhero genre and have a great time honoring it and at the same time having fun with it. Charismatic and clever all around and really fun to read.
I want to see this movie!
I want to see this movie!
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The only way you could write this script is by living in the real world as a true geek/nerd! Which is awesome!
I can visualize the movie, it has a terrific gait, very fun.
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Really smart and fun
I have to say this was great.
The story was original - fun, funny and clever.
We've had lots of alternative takes on superheroes of late, but this one really works. It could have been silly or one note, but it wasn't.
The characters were nicely written - could easily have been bad caricatures - and the dialog was snappy - made me laugh out loud at times.
Very well done.
The story was original - fun, funny and clever.
We've had lots of alternative takes on superheroes of late, but this one really works. It could have been silly or one note, but it wasn't.
The characters were nicely written - could easily have been bad caricatures - and the dialog was snappy - made me laugh out loud at times.
Very well done.
3
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Love it!
How can you not love a superhero script?
Fast, funny and fun read, good writing technically. Love the ending.
We need a little more light humor in our day, would make a fun film!
Fast, funny and fun read, good writing technically. Love the ending.
We need a little more light humor in our day, would make a fun film!
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Cool script.
Excellent! This is a good idea! X-Men, Kick-Ass, Men in Black… This movies are great. Your script has a similar atmosphere. It’s a very cool story. Likeable characters. Dialogues are ok. It’s very promising project. I’m frank with you, this isn’t a masterpiece but very cool entertainment. I really like it.
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So over done...
The Avengers, The Misfits, Zoom, Sky High, Tower Prep, XMen, KickAss, The Authority, The Runaways, The League of Super Evil... What do they have in common? They're all better stories that this writer ripped off. This script is a poor rehash of all these properties - sometimes almost verbatim. It's like he wrote a tribute instead of an original screenplay. It is unoriginal, not funny and poorly written.
Amazon needs to police these reviews. 14 five star reviews for this script is a complete joke and it wastes the time of readers trying to find good material.
Amazon needs to police these reviews. 14 five star reviews for this script is a complete joke and it wastes the time of readers trying to find good material.
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Very fun superhero flick, like the Incredibles for adults
A blast really. Fun superhero flick based on the "real world," similar to Iron Man. I like my superhero movies less grim and angsty -- Dark Knight and Spiderman are great, but kinda downers. Clips along nicely, not bored in the least. Loved the characters and the ending.
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Sharp script
Real witty. Great script - and great characters. Nice action and suspense. As others have mentioned it is a fun movie similar to the incredibles and men in black and iron man. Good stuff!
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Awesome! This would have a huge box office
Warners bros needs to buy this - this would be a big summer blockbuster!
You open with a former super-villain applying to work at a Taco Bell. That's funny. And then he's murdered. Okay, so far so good. And then this Shepherd guy meets someone with super-powers and gives them a business card. And he does it again and again and again.
You need to let us know what's going on. Who is Shepherd? What's he up to? Is he putting a team together? Why is he putting a team together? Why now? Why did super-villains quit robbing banks? Did all the super-heroes quit? What's going on?
It's not a good idea to be so mysterious at this stage in the screenplay. At this stage, you want us to care. You want to engage us and motivate us to keep reading. Watch Ocean's 11 again. We know why Danny Ocean is putting his team together. His actions are motivated. We're not confused. We're following along and we're interested.
I don't know what's going on. And then you compound the confusion by sending us into a flashback. You have to be careful when introducing large numbers of people. You have to be careful with flashbacks. It's a muddle. A super-hero murders a President. Okay, why? What does this have to do with the murder of a former super-villain? And what does that have to do with Shepherd putting a team together? And what does that have to do with all the heroes and villains disappearing?
And then we're back to Patriot Lad. I have no idea if he's a good guy or a bad guy. Is he a part of the team Shepherd is putting together? He didn't get a card. Why am I seeing this guy?
Super-hero movies are so basic. Good guys try to stop bad guys. Right now yours is confusing and kinda exhausting. Simplify!