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There is a great story in Vibrations of Ice but a few scenes really threw me off. I am not against sex scenes but this one was pretty hard core and kind of came (no pun intended) out of nowhere. I don't really get why Jake recorded her saying what she said then edited it just to make Mark feel bad? Jake seemed more like the killing type but in the end was kind of like a Bond villan, too much talk and not enough kill. The device is pretty awesome and this movie almost seems to be going down the superhero route when he saves the pregnant lady in the car. The end has a lot of action and was pretty well written. The dialog is a little hefty at times and characters say what they are thinking or going to do next. A lot of it could probably be trimmed. Every time I read my script something gets chopped. The volleyball pump is really forced. It is introduced early on and when I read it I knew that it would be important but it seemed odd. Why does Fran feel the need to give this back to Mark? Why hasn't she tossed it? It's in her purse? A lot of things didn't feel legit. I really don't see Mark as the type to even be interested in volleyball or sports for that matter. It really didn't feel natural and turned out to be a means to an end. Mark has plenty of lab stuff around, I'm sure you can think up another way to save Fran. You have a great imagination and the homeless man scene was really funny. There were elements of a romantic comedy like when he ends up in the birthday cake, then there was hard core sex, then a hamsters head gets crushed, then a funny little homeless man scene, and some strip club breasts, etc. I didn't really know what kind of tone you were trying to set, the first half is a romantic/comedy, the second half an action/suspense. I just didn't see a constant tone throughout. The vibrator scene at the end seemed kind of out of place too. That belongs in a college comedy but to end the movie on that was odd. Fran was only a "freak in the sheets" in two scenes but from the very start I saw her as a business woman who only wanted her husbands attention. Maybe she can be both. Just some thoughts.