It is beautiful in the opening stage. It feels like Chinese (this is from a Chinese). Clearly Mike has some depth of understanding of Chinese culture. Writing is better than most script I read from AS, yet it still needs polishing, especially when want to make a scene's mood similar to the way it reads.
In the middle part, things start to lost their glitters. Attention to details is lower. But there are still many parts that are great. One of it is how Mike can fast forward the story in beautiful details. When it come to battle/fighting scene, everything becomes very hard to picture.
Emotionally the story don't have enough impact as the way it is written now. Many characters don't show enough emotion that will make audience believe. But this can easily boost with few lines of text because much of them just need to be floated to the surface.
Very low momentum near the end of the story, this can be bad when audience already invested their time on the screen. Minor repair needed on plot to make it end in higher note.
Overall it is a story that one can enjoy. If you ask me what I can take away from this story... I can simple say I want Shih Yang as a girlfriend. XD
In the middle part, things start to lost their glitters. Attention to details is lower. But there are still many parts that are great. One of it is how Mike can fast forward the story in beautiful details. When it come to battle/fighting scene, everything becomes very hard to picture.
Emotionally the story don't have enough impact as the way it is written now. Many characters don't show enough emotion that will make audience believe. But this can easily boost with few lines of text because much of them just need to be floated to the surface.
Very low momentum near the end of the story, this can be bad when audience already invested their time on the screen. Minor repair needed on plot to make it end in higher note.
Overall it is a story that one can enjoy. If you ask me what I can take away from this story... I can simple say I want Shih Yang as a girlfriend. XD