I decided to do a review of the first five pages of all the scripts, and come back to the script and do a full review if the first five pages made me want to read it. I decided to start with the scripts that had not already received some reviews.
I read the original script and the Amazon Studio Story Department notes and am using my personal interpretation of what they intended only.
Pros: Starts with a bang of bloody action, a real plus for keeping the zombie fans happy. And a nice transition to the banner, BTW.
Cons: Thick action/description lines. Bogs down the read. Dialog is on the nose. I was up in the air whether the line "Why don't you just die? was supposed to be humor.
Rewrite
Pros - There's some Roman history afoot, which I appreciate and a creative, bloody opening that appers to set up mystic origin.
Cons - There's some Roman history afoot, which gets a bit dreary. No Titus. Nobody to care about.
I read the original script and the Amazon Studio Story Department notes and am using my personal interpretation of what they intended only.
Pros: Starts with a bang of bloody action, a real plus for keeping the zombie fans happy. And a nice transition to the banner, BTW.
Cons: Thick action/description lines. Bogs down the read. Dialog is on the nose. I was up in the air whether the line "Why don't you just die? was supposed to be humor.
Rewrite
Pros - There's some Roman history afoot, which I appreciate and a creative, bloody opening that appers to set up mystic origin.
Cons - There's some Roman history afoot, which gets a bit dreary. No Titus. Nobody to care about.