I really enjoyed reading the script. The conflict between characters were very interesting (cross-dressing is a topic that hasn't been over-done). I liked the voice and writing style, and I really enjoyed the painted picture of hallucinations you gave.
A couple things bothered me though, for example, Chuck's character. I did care about him, but I couldn't really grasp what his desire was, and not only that, after finishing the script I didn't feel like I really knew him. Sometime I felt like he did things out of character and also unrealistic. When he was at the bon fire, he seemed normal (I know he was on the pill, but still it seems like he should've been a little more alarmed about the situation he and his father was in. Sometimes he acts like he cares, sometimes he doesn't.) Honestly, the whole scene from the time he gets to the bon fire up until the point where he talks to his dad on the phone seems a bit out of place.
Secondly, I think I would've liked to find out about Chuck and Katherine's sexual relations a little earlier in the story, or at least a better hint:)
I think you should also tweak the beginning a bit (fire in the school), to make it look more targeted towards the teacher. Chuck's arrogant talk to his ex about what he did sounded kind of lame because the assault itself wasn't much to brag about.
Again, the premise is great. Can't let good premises go to waste:)
A couple things bothered me though, for example, Chuck's character. I did care about him, but I couldn't really grasp what his desire was, and not only that, after finishing the script I didn't feel like I really knew him. Sometime I felt like he did things out of character and also unrealistic. When he was at the bon fire, he seemed normal (I know he was on the pill, but still it seems like he should've been a little more alarmed about the situation he and his father was in. Sometimes he acts like he cares, sometimes he doesn't.)
Honestly, the whole scene from the time he gets to the bon fire up until the point where he talks to his dad on the phone seems a bit out of place.
Secondly, I think I would've liked to find out about Chuck and Katherine's sexual relations a little earlier in the story, or at least a better hint:)
I think you should also tweak the beginning a bit (fire in the school), to make it look more targeted towards the teacher. Chuck's arrogant talk to his ex about what he did sounded kind of lame because the assault itself wasn't much to brag about.
Again, the premise is great. Can't let good premises go to waste:)