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Always working to improve my skills, learn something new, stretch as an artist.
Reviews I've Written
Supanatural Short Video 1 - Promo
2 stars
Not much to watch and not interested in more.
April 21, 2013
OowieWanna Short Video 1 - Excerpt from OowieWanna- Short film which inspired the pilot
5 stars
I can't find anything to knock, but I'd sure answer if you came to my door. Oowie-Tastic!
April 14, 2013
Burgandy City, Samuel's Original Draft
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A Darker Wine, you will never find!
April 08, 2013
Press Start to Continue, Pilot Script 1 - Modern Welfare
5 stars
Unique, entertaining characters with singular voices -- Really great job. Good Luck!
March 23, 2013
The Trojan Horses, Pilot Script 1
5 stars
You’ve made something I’d like to see on the little screen, good luck. I'd like to suggest “The Trojan Twin” as a new title, as well as new visuals without the horse heads. It might help.
March 23, 2013
The Trojan Horses, Mini-bible 1 - The Trojan Horses
5 stars
Bryce, I can see why you’ve received such recognition for this unique piece of work. Sorry so little attention here at Amazon, matter-a-fact only one other rating prior to me, is YOU. Very Nice job
March 23, 2013
Favorite Movies
To Kill A Mockingbird
The Fifth Element
The Shawshank Redemption
One Flew Over the Cuckoos Nest
Forest Gump
Yentl
Shallow Hal
2010
Notting Hill
Finding Forester
The Abyss
Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind
E.T.
No Country for Old Men
Garden State
The Fifth Element
The Shawshank Redemption
One Flew Over the Cuckoos Nest
Forest Gump
Yentl
Shallow Hal
2010
Notting Hill
Finding Forester
The Abyss
Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind
E.T.
No Country for Old Men
Garden State
Influences
Spielberg
Stephen King
Orson Scott Card
Piers Anthony
John Steinbeck
Robert Heinlein
David Brin
Stephen King
Orson Scott Card
Piers Anthony
John Steinbeck
Robert Heinlein
David Brin
Following
8 Projects
Finalist: Best Trailer
Semifinalist: Best Test Movie, Best Trailer
Speak to Me in Poetry
(Comedy, Drama) Matthew Wilson
Winner: Best Actor
Finalist: Best Actor
Semifinalist: Best Test Movie, Best Actor
Sequential Art
(Comedy, Drama) Ali Mohsenian
(Science Fiction and Fantasy, Action and Adventure) Amazon Studios
13 People
Winner: Best Script
Finalist: Best Script
Semifinalist: Best Script
Winner: Best Script
Finalist: Best Script
Semifinalist: Best Script
Winner: Best Test Movie, Best Dialogue Track, Best Trailer, Best Script
Finalist: Best Test Movie, Best Dialogue Track, Best Trailer, Best Script
Semifinalist: Best Test Movie, Best Dialogue Track, Best Trailer, Best Script
Winner: Best Script, Best Sci-Fi/Action Script
Finalist: Best Test Movie, Best Script, Best Sci-Fi/Action Script
Semifinalist: Best Test Movie, Best Script, Best Sci-Fi/Action Script
Hi Samuel,
What a unique world you’ve created here, the closest thing would be “Dark City” but I find yours to be more interesting. You are a truly gifted craftsman. Characters are multidimensional. Story very well conceived; wonderful descriptions of a malevolent environment. I felt like I was living in this lightless place. Very well done! The ending was a surprise. I’d love to see this on film.
Thank you for allowing me access to your story.
I have a couple suggestions for you.
My SUGGESTIONS below are preceded by “++“ to set them off from your writing.
PAGE 43:
Paola lays there in a daze. Notices Paola running toward him.
SUGGEST…
++ Paola lays there in a daze. Notices Berlin running toward him.
PAGE 51: THE DIALOGUE in THESE TWO READ “OFF” to me…
BERLIN
And I found a weird bit of
legislation. The council made it
illegal to sell, grow, or make use
of just after war. God knows why.
DOCTOR GREEN
It needs to messengered to the
council, A.S.A.P.
PAGE 52:
Doctor Green, pauses a moment, checks his pocket watch. Takes
a moment to glance at
SUGGEST…
++ Doctor Green, pauses a moment, checks his pocket watch. Takes
a moment to glance at…
PAGE 54:
Berlin nods. Gratz looks around the room.
SUGGEST…
++ Paola nods. Gratz looks around the room.
PAGE 59:
Berlin glares at it, realising.
SUGGEST…
++ Berlin glares at it, realizing.
PAGE 59:
Main living space
SUGGEST…
++ MAIN LIVING SPACE
PAGE 67:
Marsala eyes him. Before he says anything, the carriage stops
with a jolt.
SUGGEST…
++ Marsala eyes him as the carriage stops with a jolt.
PAGE 68:
Two Vampire Guards, stood to stiff attention outside the
apartment door.
SUGGEST…
++ Two Vampire Guards stand at stiff attention outside the
apartment door.
PAGE 79:
And he
will only wait there once the V
district bloody supply has been...
how shall I put this...
contaminated.
SUGGEST…
++ And he
will only wait there once the V
district blood supply has been...
how shall I put this...
contaminated.
PAGE 83:
LOUD THUMPING, FOOTSTEPS from above. Paola stops, looks up
through the gap. He listens. MORE THUMPING.
SUGGEST…
++ LOUD THUMPING, FOOTSTEPS from above. Berlin stops, looks up
through the gap. He listens. MORE THUMPING.
PAGE 85:
Berlin glares at him wide eyed, realises.
SUGGEST…
++ Berlin glares at him wide eyed, realizes.
PAGE 103:
INSERT- VIANNA image of Vianna and Paola sat on a bench
overlooking the clean silver river.
SUGGEST…
++ INSERT IMAGE -- Vianna and Paola sit on a bench
overlooking the clean silver river.
PAGE 104:
The ghost driven carriage not too far away,
SUGGEST…
++ The ghost driven carriage is not too far away.
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Wish you all the best of luck,
Patrick
generasp@gmail.com