FM 2030

For the most part, this is a great script. Writing a script about a man who has lost his memory has its inherent givens: it's mysterious, it's claustrophobic, it's paranoid. "Reminded" has it all, and I felt like it is something uniquely new.

But if this script has anything, it's complexity. The first page alone is very disorienting and really grabs you by the throat -- which is a good thing. Of course, there's always the other end of the spectrum. With complexity comes confusion, and "Reminded," while good, is also a little disorienting.

In terms of character, I have some very minor issues with Roger's past and how he's this sort of uncaring psychologist. I'm not sure I bought that. I would like to see some shuffling in Act One that gave his past more prevalence. I do like the idea of his character arc, though. Well done there.

The oldest story adage in the book is the "put your character in a tree" line. I feel the biggest weakness in this script is the lack of an external force that is putting Roger in jeopardy. Without jeopardy, we're just kind of going from one plot point to the next with nothing pushing us forward. The danger here is the story and plot floating away from its own foundations.

Prognosis: the writer has a great voice, obviously knows his stuff, and with -- I think -- one more draft with some tweaking to the story and character, this script will be ready for the big screen.

Definitely give it a read.

Whatever your view of science-fiction, you have to admit this kind of thing would be hot right now, what with Avatar and the like. The script emphasizes mythology and the reluctant hero, and all the pieces are in place (structurally), but it could use another draft with a story that is grounded in emotion rather than dazzle. The writer is developing his voice, so should definitely keep at it.