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Semifinalist: Script Spotlight: America's Ben Franklin Punch-Up
 

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Awards

Winner: Best Script, Script Spotlight: America's Ben Franklin Punch-Up
Finalist: Best Test Movie, Best Table Read, Best Script, Script Spotlight: America's Ben Franklin Punch-Up
Semifinalist: Best Test Movie, Best Table Read, Best Script, Script Spotlight: America's Ben Franklin Punch-Up
 
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(Comedy, Action and Adventure) Before James Bond, there was Benjamin Franklin: inventor, philanthropist, and the single largest exporter of kicking British as...

 

Latest Work

Credits in 6 works

Scripts

Credits Works Average Rating Downloads Date
Created
Writer

The Living Death of Holly Farrow Ervin's Original Draft (Script 1)

No rating
2 04/05/12
Writer

Draculette Ervin's 3rd Draft (Script 3)

No rating
10 02/05/12
Writer

Strangle Ervin's Original Draft (Script 1)

No rating
10 02/04/12
Writer
Semifinalist: Script Spotlight: America's Ben Franklin Punch-Up
 

America's Ben Franklin in: The Electrocution String Ervin's 1st Draft (Script 22)

3.0 stars
(1)
48 01/11/12
Writer

Draculette Ervin's 2nd Draft (Script 2)

No rating
4 12/05/11
Writer

Draculette Ervin's Original Draft (Script 1)

4.0 stars
(4)
14 02/18/11

Reviews Ervin Has Written

Little God Trailer 1

5 stars
Great, creepy, scary trailer. Nice work!
February 17, 2012

I Think My Facebook Friend is Dead, Francisco's Cut

1 out of 1 people found the following review helpful:

Awesome, Just Awesome...

Overall Recommendation:
5 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
5 stars
 
Character:
5 stars
 
Dialogue:
5 stars
 
Emotion:
5 stars
 
February 05, 2012
So, here's my review: "Wow!"

As they say, If this don't win, it's a shame.
 

America's Ben Franklin in: The Electrocution String, David's 2nd Draft

0 out of 2 people found the following review helpful:

The Humor, oh the Humor!

Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
 
Premise:
4 stars
 
Story structure:
4 stars
 
Character:
4 stars
 
Dialogue:
3 stars
 
Emotion:
3 stars
 
February 03, 2012
Now, humor is totally subjective; what one person finds funny, another may not. This script has no shortage of fart jokes, and all manner of gross stuff, but, you know what? I laughed. More than once. I happen to be a Mel Brooks/Monty Python fan, so I appreciate this sort of humor. Not every joke or gag works, but there are some genuinely funny bits. And the time-travel element adds to the fun. Gook Luck!
 

Super Robot, Valeritin's Original Draft

1 out of 2 people found the following review helpful:

Great action!

Overall Recommendation:
3 stars
 
Premise:
3 stars
 
Story structure:
3 stars
 
Character:
2 stars
 
Dialogue:
3 stars
 
Emotion:
3 stars
 
April 30, 2011
Wow. After seeing that you had 23 five-star reviews, I thought this thing was going to be Casablanca or something. It's actually not too bad, but still needs work. Too much of this... The characters were a bit one-dimensional, but hey, it's all about the robots, right? The action was good. Maybe cutting back on some of your descriptions might help. And when write something like "futuristic lamp" please tell me what that is. For action, this is a pretty cool script; for characters, it's a little lacking. But on the big screen, it could be totally kick-ass. Good luck!
 

Bum Rush, Jim's Original Draft

1 out of 2 people found the following review helpful:

Good Work!

Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
3 stars
 
Character:
3 stars
 
Dialogue:
4 stars
 
Emotion:
3 stars
 
April 30, 2011
I think the biggest problem I had with the script is its length and descriptions. You could lose 20 pages and it would read much better. Still, the idea, I think, is pretty great. The characters are mostly well-drawn, and the dialogue good. There's a lot of potential here. A strong re-write could make this thing a true winner. For a script, it's all about the premise, and you've got a good one. Just fix it up a little and I could see this translating well to the big screen. Hey, I enjoyed reading it, and barely skimmed at all, so that means you done good. Thanks for sharing!
 

Going, Going, Gone, Phil's 5th Draft

0 out of 3 people found the following review helpful:

Enjoyable!

Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
 
Premise:
4 stars
 
Story structure:
3 stars
 
Character:
4 stars
 
Dialogue:
4 stars
 
Emotion:
4 stars
 
April 27, 2011
Overall, a nice script, good read. Going in, I thought the idea of a woman auctioning off her virginity was kind of silly/kind of interest. But you pulled it off. Nice job!
 

Favorite Movies

Citizen Kane. Yeah, that's it. Just that one. And Maybe Revenge of the Nerds. I'll go with those two.
 

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