Benjamin Bechtold Germany

I really enjoyed watching this movie.

The production is very professional. I like the style of the chosen pictures. They gave a good impression about the characters. The speakers did a very good job and I love the score that Damon Stout created. The music and the cuts push the thrilling scenes to the top.

To combine the pictures with some videoparts was a great idea and it really works. Awesome!!!

The opening scene has great atmosphere and makes excited what’s coming next.

In the main plot I feld a little length. Especially in some of the highschool scenes and the investigation-scenes. In my opinion the cop was a little too clumsy. But when the thrilling scenes get more frequently the story has a great gripping flow.

The final is very emotional and thrilling as well. Besides looking at the final scene as a speech therapist, I thought: “Well, for all the years without talking she’s got a surprising good voice.” But looking at it as a writer and thriller fan, I think it’s a really good working, emotional scene that puts the tension to a great climax.

Good job!

Hey Taylor,

I read your script FRAME-UP in two sessions. It’s a well written entertaining story with articulate straightforward dialogues. I had fun reading it and two sessions are very fast for me.

I like the opening act best because it’s got great flow and puts you right into the story. Without time for taking a breath the story takes you on a ride.

The biggest intensity lies in the superb written dialogues. You’ve got real good instinct to let it rock between the lines on a sarcastic way.

I have some constructive thoughts too:

The poisoning of Kari. It’s an interesting point in the story that’s got a raw deal. She’s afraid to die but I don’t remember any symptoms of the poisoning. It would be thrilling, if Kari would have to fight more against the poison in her body. If it weakened her in moments she should rather run. Maybe this part could even help to get more closer to Kari. All in all, I liked her, because she is a great funny character. But sometimes, I didn’t get a take on her. Sometimes, she is very tough, jumping in pools from the 3rd floor and making sarcastic comments when a guy is shot right before her. And sometimes, she’s like a hysterical girl that has to be sheltered. With the symptoms of the poison and her dealing with it, you could create even more intimacy between her and the reader and give her a straighter line.

The almost-sex-scene when Kari and Jay are kidnapped is cool. But the non-reaction of Howie is even cooler. ;)) For him, it must be the most normal thing in the world that they want to have sex in their cell. If I were him, I maybe would say: “Well, you’re getting comfortable? Rather get your cloths on, you freaks!”

All in all, I had great fun reading your script and it was a great action entertainment.