Matthew van der Lee (White Rock, British Columbia)

The writers of this film are very very talented, but failed to amuse me with any sort of worthy story. All this is awkward Superbad type humour, mixed together with bad characters and Facebook. The premise in this film is terrible, I would never see this film in the theatres, because it fails to draw any sort of interest out of me. To get the majority of film lovers to watch your film you have to create a certain level of escapism, this film couldn't find a crumb of it if it were trying to attract a pack of rats. In conclusion, A very well written and made film that has no reason to get made.

I re-read this film and I found that I really liked that it was different from most zombie/creature films. You were able to keep a great Emotion throughout the film, which is very important with these types of films. I also thought that the Premise was very creative. The only problem with this film, is that there is a lack of different creatures. But this is just my opinion, so I don't think that you should look into it too much. You might love how there is only a very well written Screamer character in your film. I think that this film really deserved all of the exposure that it got. Great job. I am really glad that I re-read your film.

Thanks,

Matthew van der Lee

Hi Andrew,

I thought that you are a very talented writer when thinking of your formatting, but with everything else, you seem very confused on how to carry an interesting film. This films story is very basic and predictable. First of all writing a story about texting is a great idea, considering how popular that act is these days, but you need more of a story that just texting and meeting a mystery texting partner. Comedy is one of the hardest genre's, so I think that you need to re-write and develop this screenplay more before you can call it a day.

Best Regards,

Matthew van der Lee

Hi Michael Ezell,

I did think that the concept of this screenplay was good but I found the formatting of this screenplay to be very original and creative, which might be a problem for some readers. At first I thought that your screenplay was rushed, but I was wrong because I read it over again and I learned that I like your screenplay. Although you state that your screenplay is a Horror, Action Adventure, I think that there are some enjoyable comedic aspects of it as well. This screenplay was one of the best screenplays in the July monthly Finalists. You definitely deserve your award. Great job Michael Ezell. I'm glad that I re-read your screenplay because I would love to see this as a film some day. It could be as good as, "Zombieland," in the perspective of a Comedy, Action/Adventure, Horror.

Sincerely,

Matthew van der Lee

I re-watched this film and I changed my mind about the story, characters, and emotion. I have not memorized most of the story yet but I think that you have a lot of visionary story telling talent. I recognize this from you because I too have a progression of this talent. I think that you are one of the best story tellers in this contest and you should be very proud of this film. The emotion is a little week in some spots of the film, but I think that's not a huge problem because that is probably due to bad storyboard pictures take from the web, if I can recall. I'm glad that I re-watched this film and I will re-watch it to become more fluent with it.

Thanks,

Matthew van der Lee