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I thought this was really cute and yes it would primarily appeal to a younger audience. It kind of reminds me of Better off Dead.

Very cute. Like the idea and I laughed out loud a few times. Good work :o)

Anyone over 40 can SO identify with this movie. This is more like a documentary than a fictional film lol. I guess its what my dad used to call factionalism. Good job on editing. The sound quality is pretty good too. Because my laptop is a little slow I had trouble watching the film. I will watch it on my other laptop so I can see it better. In any case everyone in the film did a good job. It didn't look like a lot of other low budget indie projects where people speak as if they are in a high school production and the sound guy is whipping off the headphones because the actor is thinking projecting in a theater as opposed to film acting.

I wish you success with this. Good luck with your other work :o)

Good work! While it is a true story its a tad bit predictable but that doesn't mean its not a compelling story. Look at Coal Miner's daughter, and Amadeus. It would make a great visual piece as well. Good luck with this!

I don't normally rate scripts unless I feel moved to do so. I have read so many scripts on this site that read more like a shooting script instead of the proper format (e.g. "we see" "zoom in" "cut to")

Yours was properly formatted. The action is just as humorous as the dialogue. (e.g. the scene where Franklin doesn't stop "General Bright" from putting the catheter in his mouth...bruhahaha) I'm reading this one again.

I wish you the best Jason and I hope this gets picked up! I'm a very discriminating movie goer and rarely venture outside of my house to the theater because of the CRAP they make these days and call "entertainment" but this would certainly get my 10 bucks.

I look forward to reading your other work.

P.S.

I have more of a question than a criticism about your format. I see you do what I do and that's you use (Cont'd) see I'm beginning to wonder if its necessary. Its obvious that the character is still in the same scene and speaking because there is no scene change so is it necessary? Ive stopped using it. Just curious is all. Oh and also the underlining of bits of dialogue to emphasize the word...I have started to capitalize the word although I think that's probably not good. Perhaps italicize? Just wondering what your thoughts are on the matter.

In any case good job. I loved it! It was very funny!