J.B.

This is a very interesting comedy about married life and some possible alternatives. The characters in this screenplay not only come to life but they seduce you. That's unusual for a script. So getting to know the characters and investing them is real easy. Mike's goal is to get his wife to Vegas for his birthday so they can have some alone time together. Mikes wife Val makes other plans with their new found friends. The new friends lead an alternative lifestyle that Val enjoys more than Mike. When Mike invites his regular friends to one of Val's alternative parties that's when the funny begins. But the funniest line was when Mike was telling his buddies about Layla's wardrobe malfunction.

Stan: Popped out of Fell out?
Mike: Broke out.
I don't care who you are that there is funny.

Val continues have more interest in her new alternative friends and less interest in Mike.
But all is well that ends well and it does for Mike in a very good way.

David brings to life this alternative lifestyle in a fun and interesting way that has you interested and wondering about the downside both at the same time. Congratulations.

Two Roommates, who need a new income stream to pay rent, decide to become pirates. Neither one of these would be pirates know anything about boats and hire a pirate partner off of Craigslist. Now that is funny.

Oscar Wilde said there are two tragedies in life. Not getting what one wants and getting what one wants. Oscar must have read this script. Because the writer brings Oscars observation to life in a hilarious way. The two roommates are funny as hell. Adding Natalie was pure genius. The sign language between the two hit men was a riot. Nick the boat rental guy was a scream.

Steeling from the mob and sailing the to exotic beaches gets the story going. It brings on the high stakes and yet at the same time makes you want to be them. Congratulations Michael on a very well written comedy.

The opening of this screenplay reminds me of a 19th century Grapes of Wrath. With a drought bringing about hard times and setting the stage for our two main characters Pete and his brother John. Pete has dreams of making it big in the timber industry out west. After reconciling their past, John shares Pete’s dream. John leaves his family behind to go with Pete to “the Promised Land” The work is hard but the brothers are tough and stick to their goal.
Rocky has a keen sense of what life would be like in a 19th century logging camp. This working knowledge brings this story to life. The day-to-day work on the logging camp is so real you can almost smell the pine trees.
As in life not everything is as it seems and sometimes trusting the wrong person can bring about disaster. After a tremendous set back John’s determination carries him to his promised land with an explosive ending and a touching reunion with his family.

Sometimes offbeat ideas can surprise you. This Story surprised me. Kristie pulls you into her little world of zany characters with all the ease of a pro. The set up is a bit long but the wait is worth it because her characters are all so funny. For some reason I get a Joe Dirt vibe from the trailer park the main character lives in. The old man that lives next door diving under the table after hearing the back fire was funny. The mother was a scream. I think it is also funny that the hero has to go to work at a weed dispensary holding a sign for his “Medical Professional” brother. I also like the idea that even though our hero works at a medical marijuana store he doesn’t get high. That just adds to the contrast. The coach in a wheel chair bit is funny as well. The pay off at the end with the hero’s competition trying to Tonya Harding him was priceless. Very funny congratulations Kristie.

The writer has numerous grammatical errors. If you can get past that and the fact that there are no page numbers, the story is interesting. The set up is fast and the reader gets a sense of what is going on immediately. It is a story about reincarnation, which is a subject that affects people differently. In this scenario it is about a lost love in a past life. The circumstances in this Screenplay unfold very naturally. The characters are true to life. The main character Michael is a painter and the writer uses this imagery skillfully to illustrate his love of Nina through many past lives. The writer builds tension with Nina’s current husband Carlo who is very jealous. The author gives you a surprise ending that makes one question life’s mysteries

With a war storming all around the author keeps our focus inside a stone house full of wounded soldiers. The sting of war keeps the tension up as the soldiers recant their lives and intermingle their true beliefs.

A stunning realistic opening scene gives you a sense of what a war would be like.
The author pulls you into the Civil war action and before long you are in the nineteenth century right along with his dynamic characters. The rich dialogue brings these characters to life. Seth’s memories of Goose are heart felt and give a fulfilling depth to the story. The reunion at the end brings a warm end to this story of war.