Darikus Whalen (Cape Coral, Florida)

A trippy twist to the usual police drama. Very imaginative, Cecil.

The emotion kept me into the hero's journey. I like that a vampire story is set in Brisbane/AU, an unusual place for such a story normally set in Europe or the Americas. The premise needs work, but it does capture the core of the story and theme. Dialogue needs some rewording, and I 'hear' the same dialogue spoken by several characters -- but, that could be the vernacular of the group with common interests/goals much like how jargon is spoken in certain occupations. Characterization is defined; each character is his/her own. Structure is really good. Some typos are evident should be corrected. Other than the aforesaid, I feel this story has potential. Good work, Stephen. I'm following your script as it improves and, hopefully, rises to the upper tier.

The protagonist's character arc is somewhat blurred, but the journey spells it out. Chupacabra ... the mysterious, elusive and horrifying "goat bloodsucker" we only hear about, but never has humanity encountered such a creature. I know of no other motion picture about it. In the right hands this script could fly high. I'll be watching this one as it moves up the ranks. Good concept, J. Angel.

Darikus Whalen, writer of "Symbiont"