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Title Average Rating Downloads Date
Created

A NIGHTMARE ON ELM STREET Eric's Original Draft (Script 1)

No rating
1 09/25/14

KIRKWOOD Eric's Original Draft (Script 1)

No rating
1 09/25/14

SQUAD ROOM Eric's Original Draft (Script 1)

No rating
1 09/24/14

THE MAN IN THE WINDOW Eric's Original Draft (Script 1)

No rating
1 09/15/14

B.H.C. Eric's Original Draft (Script 1)

2.0 stars
(1)
19 02/12/13

THE COP KILLERS Eric's 2nd Draft (Script 2)

5.0 stars
(1)
7 09/14/12

THE COP KILLERS Eric's Original Draft (Script 1)

4.0 stars
(2)
12 08/27/12

NIGHT OF THE RED PHANTOM Eric's Original Draft (Script 1)

4.3 stars
(4)
14 04/19/12

NINER Eric's 13th Draft (Script 14)

No rating
28 03/11/12

THE BAD NEWS FIRST Eric's 3rd Draft (Script 3)

No rating
14 02/28/12

THE BAD NEWS FIRST Eric's 2nd Draft (Script 2)

No rating
1 02/28/12

THE BAD NEWS FIRST Eric's 2nd Draft (Script 2)

No rating
4 02/28/12

DEAD MEN PLAY DIRTY Eric's Original Draft (Script 1)

No rating
6 02/25/12

DARK GAMES Eric's Original Draft (Script 1)

No rating
4 02/11/12

NINER Eric's 12th Draft (Script 13)

No rating
9 01/17/12

THE BAD NEWS FIRST Eric's Original Draft (Script 1)

4.0 stars
(2)
7 01/15/12

THE BAD NEWS FIRST Eric's Original Draft (Script 1)

3.0 stars
(1)
7 01/15/12

THE UTAH MURDER PROJECT Eric's 5th Draft (Script 5)

5.0 stars
(1)
21 12/23/11

NINER Karl Peter's 2nd Draft (Script 12)

No rating
6 12/02/11

NINER Karl Peter's 1st Draft (Script 11)

3.0 stars
(1)
5 11/29/11

THE UTAH MURDER PROJECT Eric's 4th Draft (Script 4)

4.5 stars
(2)
34 11/24/11

THE UTAH MURDER PROJECT Eric's 3rd Draft (Script 3)

4.5 stars
(2)
14 11/20/11

THE UTAH MURDER PROJECT Eric's 2nd Draft (Script 2)

No rating
2 11/20/11

THE UTAH MURDER PROJECT Eric's Original Draft (Script 1)

5.0 stars
(1)
25 10/17/11

NINER Eric's 11th Draft (Script 10)

4.0 stars
(2)
32 10/08/11

IN THE STILL OF THE NIGHT Eric's 4th Draft (Script 4)

No rating
8 10/08/11

NINER Eric's 10th Draft (Script 9)

No rating
5 10/05/11

IN THE STILL OF THE NIGHT Eric's 3rd Draft (Script 3)

3.0 stars
(1)
7 10/03/11

IN THE STILL OF THE NIGHT Eric's 2nd Draft (Script 2)

No rating
2 09/28/11

IN THE STILL OF THE NIGHT Eric's Original Draft (Script 1)

4.0 stars
(1)
5 09/22/11

NINER Eric's 9th Draft (Script 8)

4.0 stars
(1)
32 09/11/11

NINER Eric's 8th Draft (Script 7)

No rating
3 09/09/11

NINER Eric's 7th Draft (Script 6)

No rating
2 09/09/11

NINER Eric's 6th Draft (Script 5)

No rating
1 09/09/11

NINER Eric's 5th Draft (Script 4)

4.6 stars
(8)
11 09/06/11

NINER Eric's 4th Draft (Script 3)

5.0 stars
(3)
7 09/05/11

NINER Eric's Original Draft (Script 1)

4.0 stars
(1)
11 09/05/11

NINER Eric's 3rd Draft (Script 2)

4.7 stars
(10)
34 08/31/11

NINER Eric's Original Draft (Script 1)

5.0 stars
(1)
11 08/27/11

Videos

Title Average Rating Plays/
Downloads
Date
Created

NINER Video 1 - thriller

4.0 stars
(2)
- 08/01/14

About

I've worked as a studio photographer for Norwegian Cruise Line: Star, Pearl and Pride of America and Sears Portrait Studio. My film related experience includes internships with James Manos, Jr. Productions, The Radmin Company, Omniquest Entertainment and Spear Films, L.L.C.

My feature catalogue includes Niner, The Utah Murder Project, In the Still of the Night, Dead Men Play Dirty, Higher Profile, The Escapers, Full Moon Junkies, A Nightmare on Elm Street, Halloween Homecoming, Breaking The Law, The Bad News First, Night of the Red Phantom, Dark Games (filmed in 2008), The Cop Killers, Open Road, and Kirkwood.

My next project will be Searching for Glory Gray, coming soon!

I love Hitchcock, Eastwood, Scorcese, Lumet, Tarantino, Sydney Pollack, David Mamet, David Fincher and the earlier films of John Carpenter. The works of Elmore Leanord. Spielberg is a given!

GoodFellas and Raiders of the Lost Ark are my top favorites! Next would be Rear Window, Halloween, Sharky's Machine, Rocky, The Verdict and My Cousin Vinny!
 

Reviews Eric Has Written

NINER Video 1 - thriller

5 stars
August 02, 2014

NINER Video 1 - Niner - Official Trailer

5 stars
I had my doubts at first but was impressed and surprise d with his performance. Check out the movie and let me know www.vimeo.com/91581010
November 08, 2013

The Alien Diaries, Glenn J.'s Original Draft

2 out of 4 people found the following review helpful:

Blockbuster potential!

Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
4 stars
 
Character:
4 stars
 
Dialogue:
4 stars
 
Emotion:
5 stars
 
September 08, 2012
I enjoyed the simplicity of the opening sequences with Archer and his analog communication device. Quiet, no dialogue. A man and his obsession over the years. I liked how he's keeping his experiment a secret from the other scientists at the observatory.

We see him over a period of years, aging, then arriving at the book store in a limousine with an ipad. His obsession hasn't changed with the changing times as he introduces himself to Colin, our main protagonist. He's offering Colin a major appraisal job at the Dibble library. I like how he's a recent widower with nothing keeping him at home. He's ready to get out of the dark, depressing house full of his kids toys and memories of his recently destroyed life. This was good. He quickly accepts the job.

I didn't see Maddy coming and I like that she's an unwelcome presence. I'm sure these two will learn to like each other as Maddy lets her hair down, but we'll be anxiously waiting for that moment to happen. And it happens fairly soon as Colin shares his findings in the diary with Maddy. They check the attic for more material as Maddy physically and literally lets her hair down, using the pin to unlock the mysterious glowing chest. There's twice the tension here. What's inside the chest and what's going on between Colin and Maddy. This is good.

What's sort of off-putting for me is the constant back and forth between 1781 and present day. The diaries are very effective as I would personally like to hear more from them and not show as much of the UFO crash and crash site. The Close Encounter-ish scene where the UFO moves closer to the Dibble home was effective because we aren't sure what's happening and where these lights are coming from. Granted, that movie wasn't very subtle in not showing the spacecrafts, but it was in the opening sequences where Richard Dreyfuss was reading his map and when Melinda Dillon's boy was getting taken by the aliens. The diaries lose their power when we see everything played out in front of us. It's like Colin is merely telling us what we're about to see. This gets kind of old for me...

But by page 45, Colin and Maddy are searching for the crash site and things are exciting again. Let's see what happens next.

I liked using the diary to piece together where the crash site map has been hidden. In pieces all over the house. I enjoyed how they used stick figures holding circles (rocks) to show how the kids have buried the ship. Very Amazing Stories, Spielbergish. Cute. They come across the ship fairly quickly, which leaves us with a lot of story to go.

I found The Dibbles naming the alien Bronte and teaching him English was a bit cutesy pie and leaning more towards an ET or Harry and the Hendersons feel. There's a real change in tone here based on the first half of your script. It comes off a bit strange and kills that early tension I felt from the first diary, but the story is also getting more and more interesting as the other aliens come for him.

All the shooting and alien invasion stuff is kind of strange, but is a nice visual to go with our eighteenth century backdrop. I gotta say, I'm very confused who Bronte is and where he comes from, but I like the suspense being built here. The other aliens want him and they want him bad. I did get a sense here that Bronte was actually Archer, and that Archer knew the return of his people was near when we see Bronte morphing back and forth between human and alien. Although, I wasn't quite sure. This, and Mary, were nice reveals at the end.
Maddy and Colin finally get their moment and she's sucked into the spaceship. Nice shock value and some light comedy.

Great ending with the teenager having the hots for Kate. "She's too old for you".
This was a page turner for the most part, but I did lose interest in a few spots with all the back and forth between present day and 1781. This takes away from the diaries, which was the most interesting concept about your script.

I was hoping for more of the diaries, piecing together more clues, without us seeing everything played out on screen. More mystery. But going the mystery route would mean a huge rewrite and change in tone to your story. Bronte becomes a real life character, not just an idea, which he really was in the first half of the script. I didn't find him all that interesting or really wanting to follow his journey, but I think you have enough strong reveals and surprises here to keep people invested and a great, triple whammy of an ending!

My only advice. More of the diaries. And give the initial Bronte scenes more of an impact. How does he learn from humans so effortlessly? E.T. had certain trademarks that made him E.T. What is it about Bronte that's unusual or different enough for us to wanna follow his story and invest in your script?

Great premise and worthy of as many rewrites as you can muster. This has bigger potential with more of a focus on the Bronte alien. He will be your major draw if this were ever filmed. If he's interesting and different, an audience will follow his journey, no matter what.

4 out of 5 for me.
 

The Reunion, Michael's 2nd Draft

2 out of 3 people found the following review helpful:

Romy and Michelle meets Forgetting Sarah Marshall

Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
 
Premise:
4 stars
 
Story structure:
3 stars
 
Character:
4 stars
 
Dialogue:
4 stars
 
Emotion:
3 stars
 
September 02, 2012
THE REUNION

I came across "The Reunion" a few times while searching for possible scripts to read and do swaps with, and the premise stood out for me. I like films that tackle ten year reunions, discovering what old classmates have been up to and the regrets that come with age and the desperate desire to do it all over again. It's a concept that resonates with anyone currently attending high school, or graduated from high school. Great for older teens and young adults who can all relate to the material in some form or fashion.

What I expected was a deep examination of these people that made up the class of Nazareth High School, 2005. What were they like back then, what are they like now? You did this with Amanda, David, Jobe, Denise and Jason, but what about the other students they went to school with? Amanda gets the story rolling when she searches the graduating class, one by one, seeing what many of them are up to. I liked that you wrote these characters as mostly successful, celebrities, or in the spotlight at some point in their lives.

A few weeks ago, I attended a dinner with twelve people I haven't seen since graduating all the way back in 95'. Most of the more exciting conversation revolved around a classmate who married Travis Tritt, while another posed for Playboy. (You could feel the bitterness, jealousy and hatred in the air, mostly from the ladies)

I think the real fun in a story like "The Reunion" is creating that hate fueled tension and jealousy that comes with watching other succeed where we fail. I kept waiting and waiting for David and Jobe to get wrapped up in some kind of elaborate scheme to lie about their successful lives. I wanted to see how they were gonna pull this off and show up the bullies, popular kids and anyone else who made their lives difficult in school.

I also expected to see these other "so called popular kids" lie and exaggerate their own success stories. That's the real fun of a class reunion is that everyone wants to outdo one another. We didn't really get that with this script. It really focused in on David getting even with Jason and winning his girl back.

I was anxious to see how this class reunion would turn out. What this story is really concerned with is the love triangle with David, Denise and Amanda, which is a tried and true formula that's had much success since movies like Pretty in Pink, and Some Kind of Wonderful all the way back in the John Hughes era, mid 1980s. It sort of works, in a cliched, predictable way and is always fun to see two bickering females outdoing one another to win the heart of a man. The sex scene as Amanda hears through the wall is straight out of Forgetting Sarah Marshall.

The parts that made me smile the most were Jobe's one-liners and his back and forth bickering with David. They were good together. Great running gags about him smelling like curry and David's weight problem. You weren't trying too hard with the comedy here and it was subtle and smart, for the most part. It wasn't all in your face, but the sarcasm was subtle and worked for me. I like how they referred to other characters as looking or acting like celebrities or characters from video games (Dalhsim). I did laugh a lot!

My main gripe is "where is the story?" You have a great premise here that leaves you with so many different options and avenues. We were led to believe early on that Amanda would help these two losers scam their way into becoming instant successes, whether via the internet, facebook, or whatever. I was waiting to see what these two could come up with that would blow away the competition. David simply lies about owning the convenience store where he works with Jobe.

Although there was a lot I enjoyed about this romantic comedy, I thought there were a lot of missed opportunities with such a great concept. I was thinking Romy and Michelle and got Forgetting Sarah Marshall.

I can say you have a strong understanding of how to structure a romantic comedy and have all the typical characters playing versions of other similar characters from other films. I say, keep your love triangle, but don't let it be your main focus. I think you should develop these other characters...the cage fighter, the rapper, etc, as we follow a wider range of characters.
I would say a script like The Reunion demands more of an ensemble cast of characters, all trying to outdo one another, if not just to keep the tension building and create more of a contest between various characters either anxious for, or dreading their high school reunion.
Know what I mean? I hope this helps.

4 out of 5 for me. It made me smile. But, like the other reviewer mentioned, check out The Screenwriter's Bible by David Trottier to tighten up your format. I thought the descriptions and action were the weaker link here, despite some pretty strong dialogue.

Eric D.
 

The Culling, c's Original Draft

1 out of 2 people found the following review helpful:

Impressed with the format

Overall Recommendation:
5 stars
 
Premise:
4 stars
 
Story structure:
4 stars
 
Character:
4 stars
 
Dialogue:
5 stars
 
Emotion:
5 stars
 
July 10, 2012
I'm avoiding doing reviews, but I had to tell you I was, for the most part, impressed with the quality of writing here. Very good format, a bit descriptive in some places, but reminded me of a well-written shooting script.

Very nice!
 

Storm Dragons, Leonardo's 6th Draft

0 out of 2 people found the following review helpful:

Wildly Inventive Fantasy Film!

Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
4 stars
 
Character:
3 stars
 
Dialogue:
4 stars
 
Emotion:
3 stars
 
June 01, 2012
STORM DRAGONS - DRAFT 8 REVIEW

The action sequences, especially the sword duels, were particularly staged well and were visually compelling in your descriptions. The format here is top notch and so is the fantasy world, and the fantasy speak you've concocted with your characters. The overall premise of the Storm Dragons defending Thalderon, which is the nation stuck between the enemy nations, was compelling and left open several possibilities for a great story. It was simple enough to work really well. But the key is trying to keep it simple and not overblown.

The biggest problem I had with this concept is trying to follow along with the great number of odd-named characters and their distinct purposes within the story. I can see that you put a great deal of time and effort into your well-thought out dialogue and fantasy speeches concerning the purpose of the Storm Dragons, the Dragon God, the Night Eye and the other mythical figures and their legends. It reads and sounds like a film within the fantasy genre.

But I just couldn't quite follow along after about thirty pages in. I felt that the author got so caught up in the "fantasy speak" that it not only hurt the pacing but hurt the reader's ability to identify with the characters and their journey. I know it's fantasy, but their needs to be some moments of levity in this, or something that can easily be translated to the modern day.

Too many long passages became frustrating to me early on...but I feel I'm at a disadvantage here, because I typically hate fantasy films like 300, Wrath of the Titans and Conan The Barbarian. I'm probably not the best person to critique your script because I just can't get into the story or fantasy world dialogue.

The best, and worst, thing about fantasy is that you can create whatever world you want and real world rules don't apply. But the tendency with fantasy is to get too carried away with your own ideas that the ideas become scrambled and un clear.

I got lost pretty early on and couldn't identify with any of the characters or felt the need to follow them on their journey. I feel this was due to too much information and back story thrown at me all at once.

I could see simplifying this story to a great extent, cutting down on characters and giving them a distinct voice and purpose that stands out. But I was immediately drawn in by the city of Thalderon and the passages between the enemy nations. This was a great, simple concept that left a lot of open doors for story concepts about the rival nations.

But strong format, great action sequences and very inventive fantasy world and distinct language show a professional at work with Storm Dragons.

Sorry about the delay.
 

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