Edward Morgan (Tampa)

I liked this script. It wasn't as funny as your other work, but I enjoyed it non the less.

The main issue is the typos. (also and issue in your other work). After that then your golden. I suggest reading it through slowly on paper. Then correct the issues on paper, and then finally do the corrections on your electronic copy. I also agree with the other review posted. this does seem like it would be pretty cheap to make and may have decent money earning in the box office.

Overall I'd give it a "B" just redo it at a slower speed.

Good luck.

I only have a few more pages left, but thus far I like it. LOADS AND LOADS of action. I suggest you read it and I can pretty much promise you will like it. It may be to "gritty" for some but it depends on the person.

I myself am a lover of comedy and action. This had mostly comedy and had small amounts of Action. That being said I think that If a movie were made from it the director could enhance the small action parts and possible make it more than what it is. What we read in a few pages, could transpire into 10-20 minutes on camera.

Moving along...I came across a few Typos and that was about it. I laughed at the midget and I keep pictureing that black midget (hes always in movies, but I cant recall his name) as the bank midget, with Michael Clark Ducan as the big guy side kick. That would be great on screen.

Overall on a scale of 1-10 i'd give it a solid 8. It has potiental and has tons of funny moments. Suggested read for all.