WK BONG (Kuching, Malaysia)

I must say this is a genuine work of heart. I was a jungle boy, and I understand every survival skill that were presented here. The best part is the story also talk about Borneo, the island I'm on.

I'll start by highlighting some of the not very good parts:

Characters "intro" description are way too long, they can be shorten to not thwart the flow of storytelling.

Few lines in the beginning part of the story should be in the parenthetical, but was put in action.

There are also a number of suggestive lines for actions, that can't be told with pictures and sounds. Mostly this way of writing is influenced by novel writing. Another part that got influenced by novel writing is writing mundane details that can't be captured in a movie. But this is quite minor, only in the opening stage.

The use of passive sentences were mild but enough to disturb the flow, I recommend that they be changed to active sentences and shorten.

Description of a new locations, mostly way to long, made the story stall on one wing. They can be shorten while the real meanings still intact.

NOW TO THE GREAT STUFF!!!

Great attention to details. Not many can write this way, one must live it to breath it.

Great dialogs, witty but not over the top, still in context of the story.

Storytelling is where this script shines the most. It talks about a wide range of topics, from logging, animals, survival, a bit of politic, broadcasting, addiction, conspiracy, revenge, sabotage and most importantly the heart of man. There are not a moment of dull.

I wish the script be lengthen to explore deeper understanding of the topics above.

Almost forget one point, the ending is a little down and sliding towards mediocre. Since BOBCAT is living in the forest how about ending it in higher note, this will show that he is continuing his life on another epic proportion that will be another start of another story.

All in all it's a nice story, the funny dialogs are fresh and with insights and wisdom. Not anyone can just write those.

FINAL VERDICT: It made me wanna go for hiking, a week, may be a month. XD

Writing: Not the best writing, but progression is a gem. Too many spelling errors that we can laugh at. Yet not too much harm done on that part.

Story and all: The story starts with enough weirdness to hook you pages after pages. At midway through, some parts are over done. A little tone down might do it some good, some reference in dialogs are quite overboard. Other than that the story is well paced, not a moment of dull. Not to spoil everything, to those who haven't read this I recommend you to do it, but be prepared to giggle at typos and the funny story. XD

Overall: A gem in the rough.

It is beautiful in the opening stage. It feels like Chinese (this is from a Chinese). Clearly Mike has some depth of understanding of Chinese culture. Writing is better than most script I read from AS, yet it still needs polishing, especially when want to make a scene's mood similar to the way it reads.

In the middle part, things start to lost their glitters. Attention to details is lower. But there are still many parts that are great. One of it is how Mike can fast forward the story in beautiful details. When it come to battle/fighting scene, everything becomes very hard to picture.

Emotionally the story don't have enough impact as the way it is written now. Many characters don't show enough emotion that will make audience believe. But this can easily boost with few lines of text because much of them just need to be floated to the surface.

Very low momentum near the end of the story, this can be bad when audience already invested their time on the screen. Minor repair needed on plot to make it end in higher note.

Overall it is a story that one can enjoy. If you ask me what I can take away from this story... I can simple say I want Shih Yang as a girlfriend. XD