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I Think My Facebook Friend is Dead, Donnie's 2nd Draft

1 out of 5 people found the following review helpful:

Convoluted.

Overall Recommendation:
1 stars
 
Premise:
1 stars
 
Story structure:
1 stars
 
Character:
1 stars
 
Dialogue:
1 stars
 
Emotion:
1 stars
 
April 06, 2012
I must have blinked when the facebook-come-Twitter grammar course was on offer, not that I would have taken part in it, as English grammar is hard enough to use correctly due to nazi-nit-pickers, and through its versatility.
I had no idea what was being said in the opening scene, the abreviations, the slack descriptions and the foriegn text, also, a lot was told and not described. What is an American Beauty? A milk shake, a chicken burger. The second part was meaningless too. I defy anybody to explain this script in detail, it gave me a headache trying to translate the words into pictures.

Try again, in English this time.
 

12 Princesses, Rob's Original Draft

0 out of 4 people found the following review helpful:

I truly believe this children's screenplay was written by a child who has yet to grow up and learn how to write and edit (Homophones). I had to work hard to imagine the scenes.

Overall Recommendation:
1 stars
 
Premise:
1 stars
 
Story structure:
1 stars
 
Character:
1 stars
 
Dialogue:
1 stars
 
Emotion:
1 stars
 
April 06, 2012
First of all, the narrator told about the fantastic scenery and the castle, but didn't describe it. The same with the character - the king was sad. Well I'm sad, after reading this - should I describe my facial features, as it would help. And, what are 'fortunes'? Are they the slips of paper inside the fortune cookies? The king's pathetic attempt at humour was pathetic. I haven't read Grimm's 'The 12 Dancing Princesses'. Is this a copy of the book?
Sorry, this cript - sorry, script left me cold, as the author left a glaring homophone after editing.
 

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Winner: Best Test Movie, Best Dialogue Track, Best Trailer, Best Actor
Finalist: Best Test Movie, Best Dialogue Track, Best Trailer, Best Actor, Best Kids and Family Script
Semifinalist: Best Test Movie, Best Dialogue Track, Best Trailer, Best Actor, Best Script, Best Kids and Family Script
 

12 Princesses

(Comedy, Kids and Family) Rob Gardner

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