Kelly Parks (San Diego)

Positive:

A lot of cool scenes and interesting characters.

Fascinating premise. I love zombie movies and if this was made as is I would totally recommend it to my friends.


Negative:

Are you planning on directing this? Because if you are, then it's okay that this is a shooting script. But if not, then this is a spec script and having camera directions like "we push in" or other directing from the script, like ellipses (i.e. What should we...do?) are completely wrong. Directors and actors HATE when the writer tries to tell them what the camera should do or how they should deliver a line. That's their choice -- not yours. You also do not get to pick the songs.

Seriously, directors and actors hate writers that direct from the script.

Non-cinematic writing: When a character looks around the car and you write "No cassette tapes in sight", ask yourself how that gets across to the audience in the theater. That's fine in a novel but for people watching the movie, how do they know that when the character looked around the car he was looking for cassette tapes? Always, always imagine what you're writing as a movie and imagine what the audience is actually seeing and hearing.


Technical:

First, full disclosure: I'm a former aerospace engineer and a life-long space geek.

That being said, the power going out on the ISS would NOT make the space station decelerate. An object in orbit is not under power. There are literally hundreds of dead satellites and upper stages of rockets in orbit that will still be there 10,000 years from now. That's not how orbit works.

Yes, a solar flare can cause the super-thin upper layers of Earth's atmosphere to expand and increase the drag on satellites in low orbit, causing their orbits to decay and bringing them down a few months sooner. But stop them dead in their tracks? No.

People don't realize how fast things in orbit are moving. The ISS is moving many, many times faster than a rifle bullet. If the ISS collided with another object in orbit, both would be instantly and completely destroyed.

If you want clarification or to otherwise discuss any of my comments, let me know.