Gary Winston

Wow this is very interesting, on so many levels. I first see that the structure of the story is solid. I did notice some typos, but those are things I consider to be cosmetic, and easily fixed.

The premise is good, along with the story line. However I think you might want to explore the background of the 'CREEPERS' and where they came from and why. Maybe I missed this!

The character are well fleshed out, I could relate to Marko. His wife "KERRY" was a true to life sista. I would like to see tighter dialogue from all characters. The emotion of this script for me is good. Did the fireworks ending completely kill all the creepers or will we get a sequel.

Overall this is a great late nite weekend flick. Great work!

This is basically a great action script I can feel where you wanted to go with the story. The premise is good it captures the essence for a feature script/motion picture.

The story srtucture is there, however I think it can be a little nore tight in relation to the flow of the action. There were a couple of spots were the action did not flow well (for me), however this is minor.

character, the characters were well fleshed and likable. The main characters' dialoge could be a little more crisp. Snappier. direct. But still help move the story forward. I would give him only the needed dialogue to move the action.

Overall the dialogeu can be a little tighter. again have the character dialogue short and to the point.

As I said the emotion of the story is there and will improve as the minor changes are made.

Remember I am NOT a professional and this is only my opinion. Great work!

I felt this was a great premise for a movie. The pacing I thought was well executed and gave the story the feel of a motion movie. The story structure is solid in relation to the three step structure. The characters were good, I do however feel that the lead character (Jack)need's more action to move his character out front of the others. The dialogue is good it moves the story forward. I would like to see some of the dialogue a little more snappier where the main character is concerned.The emotion can be easily manage with a few minor changes in the dialogue and a few changes in the plot. overall I would like to see this as a movie only after a few changes are made.

The premise was ok, there's plenty of werewolf movies around. However, this is the type of movie I enjoy watching. The pacing of the story was great not rushed or to slow. The story structure I feel was very tight. It allows for the audience to find and follow their fav. character. The dialogue was punctual, or shall I say it kept the story flowing in and at a good pace. I feel that this was overall a well written script. My only complaint is, if I may say I hated that the little girl was killed. GREAT SCRIPT!

I thought this story opened in a great pace. It captureed my attention and kept it as the story moved forward. I thought the pace of the story was excellent. I like the characters, they are charachter that we as an audience can relate to. The Dialogue was real and it moved the story forward.

I do however think the story is a little long. Also some portions of dialogue were a bit long winded. I feel that if some of the longer dialogue lines were shorter it would make for snapier dialogue. My overall impression of this script is GREAT! I would love to see this as a movie.