juan deras (santa clara)

i had finished watching the test movie so I figured it'd be worth to read the script. It was funny but i couldn't get your actors faces out of my head.

i soon realized this wasn't the exact story from the movie, but then I realized I downloaded the newest version and I must say... I loved it. The strengths remained. Rishi and Jeff Pants carried most of the laughs. It was pretty funny to see what changed and what stayed the same.

I thought your trip was a lot more interesting and could open up a lot of possibilities. Putting it in Chicago and using the sites was pretty interesting. I'm sure LA could be better used if it was chosen to be filmed there.

A couple of the moments that bothered me in the movie weren't here so I don't know if they were in the old draft or not. The bad guys took much more of a back seat which I thought allowed for more fun moments for the characters. You could feel them becoming friends. The danger escalated more smoothly and I think this helped tension.

Now the big change. The villain. I loved it. The big black music producer replaced by a nerdier nerd. His master plan was hilarious and it fit.

Congratulations on this and the movie's success. I'm convinced I'll see it on screen on day.

I had watched a few test movies from this site and was left very unimpressed. After seeing this is off of scriptshadow I figured I'd give it a shot -- I was very impressed. From the opening 5 minutes I could tell it would be a well-done endeavor. The actors did a great job bringing these four unique characters to life. This is timely, it says something and ultimately could be huge. I can see this being the type of film that would not just do well in the US but global.

That being said there are places it can improve. When the two guys put the guns to their head in a cafe, I was a little thrown. How does none of the workers or customers say or do anything? This whole sequence felt manufactured. Him wanting to make a phone call, at the exact time the bad guys are there. I assume they would at least take these guys outside. I chalk this up to limited budget and less locations.

I think one of the bigger areas to improve would be to tighten up the start and get to more crazy expeditions in the middle of the film. I felt these things were kind of crammed into a short period. In some of the locations most notably the Dreamz, I feel like there should have been more urgency from the characters. They kind of just were there. Some at the bar, some watching a show. It took me out for a bit. I'd expect these characters to be more active throughout. The ending and whole music producer thing felt a little done, so this could be a place to improve and was probably my least favorite part of the story.

Overall I was laughing a ton. This is a funny movie with funny performances and can easily see this being on the big screen. Jeff Pants was my favorite. His character was just so out there. The guy who played Rishi was really good, totally sold me on his character. Honestly in this type of movie I was surprised to see so much attention brought to the characters.

I know I'll see this in the theater one day. Good job all. Hope these notes help.