Chris Kennedy (Salt Lake City)

I enjoyed this very much. I think with a little more work, it will be one of those greats that all ages can enjoy. It still seems a little rough which I expected, it being a storyboard. I thought the dialogue needed some more fleshing out. At points, it seemed to be more of a children's show style, which may have been what you were going for. With some refinement of the dialogue to appeal to all audiences, I think this would be a fantastic family movie sure to captivate everyone.
The story is great. I love the premise. My recommendation would be more with the flow of the story. The beginning was the biggest thing that I noticed. It's seven minutes into the movie before you get into the story involving the princesses and the main title. I think the flashback and title would be best put at the beginning before Yannick is introduced in his dream sequence. The beautiful music during that will enchant anyone listening to it and onto the story right from the beginning, leaving them wanting more of it. With it the way it is, it just seemed jumpy and you got quickly confused as to what was going on in the story. I would think that what you were going for was to stay away with what I will call the "Disney way" of starting out a fairy tale, but the only way I can think of doing that is to have Yannick told or introduced to the story after being kicked off the farm, which then would require changes to how the story unfolds, and I don't think you need to change that. The story was also a little disjointed in why the princesses were locked away. It seems that they are not supposed to be out from the get go, yet no explanation as to why it was so unique in how they got out that time and then not later in the story.
I like the idea of this being an animated film and think it will do great as one.
Great work as always! Keep them coming!