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Very good! Very original idea, great characters and story line
Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
Premise:
5 stars
Story structure:
4 stars
Character:
4 stars
Dialogue:
2 stars
Emotion:
3 stars
November 18, 2010
Great story premise, everything flows really well. The only thing I would consider is developing the dialogue a little bit more..some lines don't really seem that believable/realistic. I would also develop Skylar's emotions a bit more towards the end when she is faced with losing the baby-unless you want her to seem like a very strong character, which could also work, but for now she is a little in the middle. I loved the Lilo and Stitch part and how it subtly foreshadowed what would happen and also the story on the radio of the baby who was growing up too fast, everything was foreshadowing. The ending was perfect as well, just make sure we know who each of the children are that we have already met. Great job!
