Kimberly Britt (Hawaii)

Wow. Such a simple word, but it really reflects my thoughts on this script. First of all, I love baseball and romantic comedies, so when I saw the combination, I had to give this a read.

The premise is really unique and I knew from the start that it would lend itself well to humor and some tension later on in the script, and I wasn't disappointed.

The characters were all amazing and detailed, and not just the main ones, but smaller ones like the Ahmed and Zeke, too. It's really impressive how much the reader feels they know about each character when there were so many of them.

Dialogue was probably THE best thing about this script. I loved Petra's accent, loved all Maddy's nerdy baseball knowledge and found the teaching scenes specifically well-written.

I can't say enough good things about this script. I think it would make an excellent movie and hopefully it will get that chance. Best of luck!

The Exorcist is THE scariest movie I've ever seen and this had a distinctly Exorcist feel to it. I would even venture as far as to say it's slightly superior, at least in my opinion.

I think the thing that I found the most chilling is the fact that I have a daughter around Sara's age and it forced me to think about what I would do and how I would feel if something like that happened to her.

I love the way you describe your characters, ex: "husky midwest steak fed body". Informative and witty in the same breath.

I found all the dialogue to be snappy and true to life, particularly the "cop talk". I've read countless scripts where the cops all talk like you're watching an episode of Law and Order and this didn't have that feel at all. Sure, there were a few places where it felt a tad bit on the nose, but for the most part nothing sounded unnatural or cliché.

Looking at the script on a grand scale, it’s chilling and really gets into your head. And it’s not just the big things. There is a subtle creepiness to it as well. The little atmospheric nuances that will undoubtedly play out better on screen than on paper. For instance, when the clock stops ticking, then starts up again and when the face of Christ on the crucifix suddenly turns demonic. It’s those little artistic touches that make this script stand out and demand your attention. Great job!

First of all, great logline. Short, catchy title that gives the jist of what the script is about. Good on both of those.

Characters: I thought you did a great job building some solid, 3 dimensional characters. I loved Sam's quirkiness and the repetition in his speech. I liked Angie's defiance and how she could be somewhat fickle at times, going along with certain things Sam said and then completely disregarding him at other times (for instance when he didn't want her to pick up Emily from the coffee shop). And then there's Emily -- you really captured the essence of the "smart mouthed" adolescent.

Plot: Awesome. The best thing this script has going for it. Although the idea of a character reliving the same day/hour over and over isn't all that unique, you found a way to take an idea that's been done and breathe new life into it and make the reader feel like it's the first time they're reading/watching something like this.

Dialogue: Really good, for the most part. Like I said, I really felt like Sam's repetitive dialogue went along with his frame of mind. And again, I think you really captured Emily well with her dialogue as well. If I had to pick on any character's dialogue, I would say that Dr. Oliver's didn't always ring exactly true, although I can't pinpoint exactly what it is about it that bothered me. Sorry, I know that's not helpful. Maybe it's just that it wasn't as telling about his personality as it was with other characters (Emily, Sam, Angie, etc.)

Overall, great job!