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Fun but Formulaic
Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
Premise:
4 stars
Story structure:
4 stars
Character:
4 stars
Dialogue:
5 stars
Emotion:
4 stars
June 16, 2012
Fun and light. The individual moments between characters are often great, witty unexpected dialogue. But, as noted by others, the overall storyline is almost too predictable even for a rom com. I think even just changing this name would help a bit, Super Friends highlights the fact that the movie is going to be about two good friends that become something more-- ie we know from the very first second who the love birds are going to be and what relationship hurdle they're going to overcome. The more unusual aspect of your plot is the fact that these two have never had good sex before ever. Why not name it something about that? ("Bad Sex" might be a little crass, but something along that theme.) Then the audience comes in thinking of that as the main conflict and then the friends-to-lovers romance is a freebie, rather than supposed to carry the whole story. Not that a simple name change can do everything, but it would at least highlight the considerable strengths of your script while de-emphasizing the more formulaic aspects.
Agreed with Toby. On the plus side this isn't bland/slow like many sitcoms. But it is unfocused and hard to visualize. I ended up feeling like it should be funny but was too hard to follow.
