Personal Incorrectness

Creator: John Rainone
Age rating: 17 and older
Four New York millennials, including a sassy Muslim girl, an unapologetic smartass, a foolish sucker, and another guy attempt to grow up in college to no avail.

Latest Work

  • Pilot Script 6
    11/04/17
    Creative Notes:
    In this, I used more engaging storylines and enhanced the humor.
    Logline:
    David juggles his date with Carla and a search for his dog, Nick helps Aleemah with her paper while Aleemah helps Chris find a new girlfriend.

All Work

  • Pilot Script 5
    08/17/17
    Creative Notes:
    This version scraps the others and emphasizes developing the characters through their interactions; Aleemah as a meddler, David as a diligent victim of life, Chris as the reluctant friend, and Nick as Nick.
    Logline:
    Nick and David go on a double date while Aleemah tries to help Chris move on from his ex by setting him up with another girl.
  • Pilot Script 4
    07/25/17
    Creative Notes:
    I decided to use different stories and to use different kinds of dialogue.
    Logline:
    Nick gives Aleemah a Muhammad sketch, Chris gets stabbed, David tries to ask out a crush.
  • Pilot Script 3
    07/06/17
    Creative Notes:
    In this, I reworked the stories to showcase the characters' potentials.
    Logline:
    Nick annoys everyone with an N-word joke, Jacob attempts to recruit people into communism but finds that people have some kind of problem with it, David has a pregnant girlfriend and Aleemah learns about guy talk. Set in fall 2016.
  • Pilot Script 2
    06/15/17
    Creative Notes:
    In this revision, I changed David's story and used better conversational models for most of it while making Aleemah's story line more mild and put more sense into the script.
    Logline:
    Nick annoys everyone with an N-word joke, Jacob attempts to recruit people into communism but finds that people have some kind of problem with it, David has to break up with his girlfriend and Aleemah was randomly selected for additional screening at JFK airport.
  • Pilot Script 1 - To Disregard Decency
    05/15/17
    Logline:
    Nick annoys everyone with an N-word joke, Jacob attempts to recruit people into communism but finds that people have some kind of problem with it, David has a pregnant girlfriend and Aleemah was randomly selected for additional screening at JFK airport.