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A fantastic new anti-hero - Z-MAN

Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
3 stars
 
Character:
3 stars
 
Dialogue:
2 stars
 
Emotion:
2 stars
 
February 15, 2012
A remarkable accomplishment! Well done! I suspect if the script was better, the storyboard animation, and actors wouldn't have had to work so hard to sell the idea. Impressive though!
 
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Review of Z-Man

Overall Recommendation:
2 stars
 
Premise:
2 stars
 
Story structure:
2 stars
 
Character:
2 stars
 
Dialogue:
2 stars
 
Emotion:
2 stars
 
February 14, 2012
CONCEPT: What if a dying research scientist decided to inject himself with an untested formula that inadvertently turned him into a zombie? It's a strange concept, namely because the protagonist doesn't turn into the prototypical zombie, but sort of temporarily regains his humanity after munching on a brain. It's not what I expected.

An alternative to this concept could have Zedderman slowly turn into a zombie, slowly developing his lust for brains. Doing such would bring instant urgency to the overall story (in the form of “can Zedderman find a cure before he turns into a zombie?”). Not to mention, the overall goal of the story would be pretty clear.

Such an alternative concept could give you a chance to develop higher stakes too. Maybe his family cannot survive without him financially.

There would be room for dramatic irony, too, as Zedderman could keep the secret of his illness from his wife—while she talks about her future plans, how they should buy a bigger house, etc.

STORY: To be honest, the story, as told in Test Movie #9, confused me. I couldn't tell you exactly what the protagonist was working on (a vaccine of some sort) or why, after he injected himself, he needed to get the five million dollars. I think you mention that he needs it to complete his research, but then you have his wife in the lab doing her own experiments (or finishing up his research—I'm not sure).

The goal needs to be made more clear. How will five million dollars help Z-Man achieve his goal? I never got the sense that he really could be saved from his condition.

What's really at stake here? Zedderman's humanity? He's fighting for his life but I never get the sense that he could actually achieve it.

The urgency, I suppose, comes from what seems to be his increasingly poor state, almost as if he's nearing a threshold at which, once crossed, there will be no chance at recovery. But still I'm not sure.

Maybe have it so that, if Zedderman doesn't recover, his wife will lose the house, or his death benefits, so his family will suffer if he can't recover.

The repetition of brain-eating scenes doesn't help either. Zedderman, in his brain-eating frenzy, seems to be unstoppable. Where is the insurmountable odds? Where is the villain? Why didn't Z-Man kill Heston when he had the chance (in the garbage truck)? Given Z-Man's almost mindless nature, I don't know what stopped him from doing such.

CHARACTERS: Zedderman, like all the characters in this story, lacked dimensions. I can't tell you all that much about these characters because it seems like they don't have much of a past. They just felt quite flat.

Giving Heston that dog as a companion seemed like an odd choice, too. I mean, it seems like he is the antagonist early on. Giving him that dog seems like a choice to give him sympathy. It just didn't quite click.

I know you introduced the Old Man character on the TV early on, but at the end, when Zedderman kills him, I just didn't know how he factored into the story.

STRUCTURE: The structure of this story did not aid in giving me any sense of when this story was going to end. I never anticipated the moments to come because I simply didn't understand what the protagonist was trying to do. I still don't know why he went to the military base (or was it a ship) with Heston and the Army Guy. Moreover, why did the Army Guy help Heston and Z-Man attack the military base? I couldn't tell you.

DIALOGUE: The dialogue felt odd in places. The one-liners, most of the time, fell flat and seemed forced. While I wouldn't call the dialogue horrible, I would say it lacked luster.

OVERALL: The artwork sufficed. However, there were a lot of moments when you would cut to black or focus too closely in on certain images. I feel like this could definitely benefit from more frames.

I have a feeling you had to cut corners making this test movie just to get it finished. And maybe that hurt the overall telling of the story to some degree. But I can't imagine that the cutting of corners reduced the clarity of the story all that much versus the screenplay version of the tale.

Though, the biggest problem with this is the telling of the story, and its overall structure. Things need to be crystal clear. One should never be in doubt as to what the characters are trying to achieve. And, unfortunately, I found myself wondering, most of the time, what the protagonist's goal was and why.

Congrats, though, on winning the Best Test Movie prize and all the other awards this project has garnered. You've clearly put a lot of effort in this and are well deserving of the honor.

Good luck with this and all your future endeavors.
 
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45 Minutes of Silent Transitions

Overall Recommendation:
2 stars
 
Premise:
3 stars
 
Story structure:
2 stars
 
Character:
2 stars
 
Dialogue:
1 stars
 
Emotion:
2 stars
 
February 11, 2012
There were so many black outs and silent transitions the show could have been cut to 45 minutes and I wouldn't have noticed. In fact, it would have improved it.
Other things, pointless side lines that detracted from the story. Dialogue that lacked a lot.
If this is intended as a bad zombie B movie with a very sick comedic twist I can see how it works. But there is so much lacking I feel like I lost a couple hours with nothing to show for it. The only reason I finished it is because I just had to know if it was all for nothing. Meh. Not impressed. Really needs work. And by needs work I mean back to the drawing board.
 

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