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January 15, 2012
I only skimmed the first part of this, but I like the concept of this being the "stoner" version of the story. I think you could do more with that, sort of like a warped version of "The Princess Bride." The device lets you get away with pretty much anything, including anachronisms -- you can throw plausibility out the window, and bring in parts of all sorts of other movies. Maybe include more of the narrator's voice (VO) in this, and develop the parallel story of the uncle and niece? You could even have the story do a rewind and revise if the niece questions the way it's going or the uncle "writes" himself into a corner.
 

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