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Die-Hardesque Action

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4 stars
 
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3 stars
 
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4 stars
 
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September 08, 2013
When a reporter witnesses a child's kidnapping, his heroic attempts to recover the girl draws him into a world of deceit where nothing is as it seems and soon finds himself fighting for his own life.

If the author's aim is to reproduce a Die-Hard type of iconic film, he is nearer to success in this 3rd draft.

Many of the problems in earlier plots are corrected here, showcasing:

- strong start
- adrenaline-pumping action
- clear protagonist
- clear antagonists
- better plot and subplots
- stronger dialogue
- engages the reader / audience in the adventure.

I love the new terrorist angle and I love that we start the movie on tense character dialogue and action. I am still reading through the script and am impressed with all the changes you made since the first draft.

There is still a bit of work to be done in the dialogue and character development. Sam needs more to make himself more of a likeable super-hero. He needs to come into his own.

Good luck
 

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