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A good story decently told.

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January 01, 2011
I enjoyed reading this. It's not a bad script at all, but it does need some work to make it novel and original. Antonitis built the script very well, in my opinion. It has set-ups and pay-offs, plot points, clear distinctions in act I, II, and III, etc. It's not the script that needs work; it's the telling of it.
I think the characters need to be more distinguishable. They're realistic in sense that everyone can relate to them, but they're too bland and vague for me to imagine them in different situations and know for a fact what they would do. I believe that if the characters are more distinguishable, then it'll be easier to grasp the emotion of the audience thus building a stronger connection between the two and bettering the story and film-watching experience.
I like the dialogue of this film. I think it's very funny and witty. There is humor in it which I admire because nowadays, it seems like movies have been using slap-stick humor. While that can be funny, it gets old fast, and it doesn't bring a laugh as genuine as everyday life humor. Some dialogue seems forced, like the mom, for example. The game is the fact that she cares more about drugs than her own son, but I feel like it's not being heighten; it's being overused instead. He should try to find different ways to use that game or maybe use a broader game, so he doesn't have to limit himself to few ways of heightening it.
For me, the ending seems a little bit cliché, but I think that's fine here due to this being a commercial film contest, so it's expected because that's what people want.

Overall, I enjoyed the story. There's definitely some laughs, and it does keep the audience engaged enough that won't feel like they're wasting their time or money.
 

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