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Great Script

Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
 
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Character:
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June 09, 2013
(I don't know if there's another draft out there, so I may be missing things in later drafts)

I like this a lot. Very unique premise - I don't think I've seen this concept in movie form before (I think I might've seen an episode or two of a TV show that came close).

Evidently, it's gotten support from big names, and deservedly, too. I look forward to seeing this on the big screen one day.

It has a very comedic tone that works (at least, most of the time). It ranges a bit on the very cartoony side, but that's not a bad thing at all.

The story has a lot of good twists. I'm used to movies that have the key conflict begin in the first act, but yours (at least, judging by the premise), the Terraforming, is compressed into the last thirty pages. However, it is tied up by story threads that begin early on, so I am okay with that.

The characters are good. I did like how the daughter has a hidden smart side, and how complex and funny Ranger Bob is - but I wish Trish and the son had been revealed a little more.

I can't find anything really wrong with the writing - save for the redundant 'LATERS' and 'SAMES', it's actually quite good.

Good job. I look forward to seeing this go places.
 
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Funny, but could use some good editing

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4 stars
 
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Character:
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May 03, 2013
This screenplay was entertaining and humorous, but the original draft needs a fine toothed comb run through it for misspellings, punctuation, and missing words. The author should try reading it out loud. There are several spots that hung me up in the reading due to these errors, but once fixed, I could see this being made into a movie. I like to think of it as "Galaxy Quest" meets "European Vacation."
 

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