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Much Improved Character Arc

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January 27, 2011
In this draft, the protagonist's motivation was beefed up and I felt for her more. I also felt I could see a more defined character arc. I also felt a bit clearer on Dr. Kent's relationship with Deacon Byrd. All in all, good changes. Draft looks cleaner. I'd still like to see some of those action sections spread out (some of those big chunks of blocking).

Great job, great changes.
 

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