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1 out of 1 people found the following review helpful:

ZvG re-write, just a few notes

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July 29, 2011
First off, the re-write is a great improvement on the original, cutting down a lot of extra, unnecessary text. Most of the following points are technical/grammatical errors that should be easy to revise. Most apply to the original draft so I will post a review there as well.

There are quite a few spelling errors throughout the script, and missing words in several spots of dialogue (like page 82, the bottom of the page has Quintus speaking and a word or two appear to be missing). Also on page 69 Lavinia says "oh god" instead of referencing "gods". Like I said- simple, fixable errors that I just wanted to point out in case they were not already corrected.

I would like to first note that I am no history expert, but throughout the script there are many words used that do not belong in a story taking place in 300 A.D.

Syringes - this immediately stuck out; i believe the first use of any type of syringe was in the late 1600's, refined in the 1800's to use fine needles.

Antidote - terms like "cure" are just fine but antidote is a term first used around the 1400's

Hospital - this is 13th century medieval/old french.

Surgeon - another term of the 1400's, ancient Romans used the term "Medicus"

Platoon - a term of the 17th century, I think.

All these should be fairly simple to research and confirm, and it would be a good idea to scan the rest of the script for similar errors. Nothing like technical errors in details of history to throw off a good period-piece zombie movie!

My only other note is that I was a bit unclear of Lavinia's character. We see her entertain before the gladiators fight, and she seems to be an entertainer. Then she asks for freedom so I assume she is a slave, but Quintus offers to take care of her. Maybe I am looking too much into everything but she just doesn't seem like a slave to me.

Regardless - I love this script and can't wait to see where it goes!
 
0 out of 7 people found the following review helpful:

Bloody cool

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July 05, 2011
 
0 out of 7 people found the following review helpful:

Great concept.

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May 17, 2011
Killer action, tons of fun gore (not the sadistic type you find in films like Hostile), and a great concept. Gladiators! Zombies! Who would who ever dreamed?!?! The draft reads very well, quick read, not too bogged down. It is what it is - a fun & entertaining romp through the genre blender.
 

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