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June 16, 2014
Dear Jack,
Hi, I am a student at Commack High School in Mr. Patterson’s Film as Literature class. I have watched the trailer and read the script of “The Pass” and here is what I’ve noticed. Jason and Anna Miller, a married couple, have a strong relationship in the beginning of the film. However, this is ruined when Anna actually gets the chance to sleep with her pass, Matt McAdams.
This movie has a lot of potential. It is an interesting conflict because Jason and Anna are slowly drifting apart. Jason has to find a way to get Anna interested back in him. However, this is challenging because they are already married and Anna knows everything about Jason. The only real way to fix this is for Jason to step up his game by doing nice subtle things for Anna to show that he cares. This movie may be appealing to teens and people over the age of seventeen. It reveals that if you have a stable relationship, you shouldn’t do anything to put it in jeopardy. The pass was completely unnecessary and only drove the couple apart. Some attractive scenes from this script are when Jason is talking to Jonah. This is because he expresses his true feelings and what he wants out of Anna, however, the scene when Matt McAdams jumps off of a roof and parachutes to safety is a bit farfetched. After all, McAdams is still a normal person, not a super hero. What you can do is have him do is climb down the building on a rope that he finds. The locations for this film can be rather flexible. Hollywood, a middle class house and any elementary school are places you may want to shoot this movie. One actor I suggest is Jennifer Aniston for Anna Miller, and Stephen Amell for Matt McAdams. Overall, I give your script a mediocre rating of six out of ten. I don’t see the passion in the characters but I think my cast can help you. Some of the dialogue is not there but if you put the work in you have the potential to have a great film.
Good luck,
Mike D’Angelo
 

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