Overall Recommendation:
4.0 stars
(1)
5 Stars:
0%
(0)
 
4 Stars:
100.0%
(1)
 
3 Stars:
0%
(0)
 
2 Stars:
0%
(0)
 
1 Stars:
0%
(0)
 
Premise:
5.0 stars
(1)
 
Story structure:
4.0 stars
(1)
 
Character:
4.0 stars
(1)
 
Dialogue:
3.0 stars
(1)
 
Emotion:
4.0 stars
(1)
 
 
1-1 of 1 review
Sort: Newest | Most helpful
1 out of 2 people found the following review helpful:

Great Family Fun

Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
4 stars
 
Character:
4 stars
 
Dialogue:
3 stars
 
Emotion:
4 stars
 
June 24, 2011
Dojo Cat is a unique story, and one that was created well. The plot is excellent, especially the way you built up the events in Bonsai's life to a climax.

However, I have a few suggestions. It seems as if the mAsAuditors want to catch Bonsai during the tournament, but they don't show up again until the end of the book. I would advise that you include them in at least one other fairly major part of the story. For example, you could include a part about them sending the dog merely to test Bonsai's strength, hinting that the seemingly dangerous dog was a minor foe compared to what will come next.

Additionally, it would have been nice to refer back to the a few of the 20 lessons, and you could work that into the story, especially during the climax. Also, when Bonsai is fighting the dog, it seems as if Bonsai is defeating the dog. Generally, it is better for the hero to be an underdog (or in this case an undercat) who comes out on top in the last few moments.

Some of the dialogue is slightly disjointed; no specific examples come to mind, though. Again, no major issues, just some possible tweaking.

Despite this, and a few minor grammatical errors, Dojo Cat is an excellent story with likeable heroes, a loathable villain, a touching relationship between the Sensei and his furry friend, and great messages. I hope the story does well - who knows, it may even become a feature film someday!
 

Reviews for