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A good clean up of the original, but nothing new

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September 12, 2011
This review is based on reading about 10 pages and skimming to the end.

This version does not attempt to address the AS notes, but appears to be a good cleanup of the original.

Three stars is my starting point for the original story, my reviews will be up and down from there. this one is basically just the original.
 

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