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1 out of 8 people found the following review helpful:

Answers Some Questions

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July 19, 2011
 
2 out of 6 people found the following review helpful:

Titus has more Personality

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July 12, 2011
Titus is more real in this one. He's a guy that I'm not sure I would like - he's stubborn, he's self-absorbed. But, he isn't supposed to be a perfect character. He is flawed. He makes mistakes but he is the only hope for Rome in this story. He is strong, brave and has a lot of heart.
 
2 out of 5 people found the following review helpful:

The Bad Guy Is Way More Evil In This One

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July 12, 2011
I like some of the changes that were made to this version. The thing I like the best is the changes that were made to Flavius. I didn't like him in the first version, but I really really despise him in this draft. He is a powerful man but he wants even more. He wants to be worshipped like a god. He is two-faced and he talks big, but deep down he's a coward. He expects other people to do his dirty work for him. He also think he's above the law. It's obvious he is far more barbaric than anyone that fights in the arena.

I like the new ending. It is a clever way to tie up loose ends and bring an ancient story to the modern world.

I am torn about the reason the wolf turns people into zombies being because it was African science gone wrong. I am glad this writer decided to answer the question, as this is not something that has been done in some pervious scripts including his own 2nd draft. It is an interesting concept and does answer a question and explain why a person might be turned into a zombie by an animal. It is true that African science and technology was advanced compared to other parts of the world and their science (including medical science) dates back to the BC times. The discoveries from Africa were introduced later to Greeks, etc. So from that standpoint, it makes sense that Africans would have had access to science not yet available in Rome.

However, there is quite a stereotype that says Africans were primative, and even stupid. It may be a hard sell to try to convince the masses that this science actually exists.
 
3 out of 13 people found the following review helpful:

African Science is amazing

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July 11, 2011
Fantastic use of African science in the third century A.D.
 

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