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Five pages didn't sell me

Overall Recommendation:
3 stars
 
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5 stars
 
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2 stars
 
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2 stars
 
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2 stars
 
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1 stars
 
September 01, 2011
Heard about this contest and thought it would be neat to read all the entries and share my thoughts, but there are so many I decided to read only the first five pages. If they grab me, I'll come back and post a review of the whole script.

I also read the original script and Amazon Script Department story notes, so I am using my interpretation of that for my comments. All intended to help craft the best possible script.

Pros on writing: Visual and formatted correctly.

Cons on writing: Over use of words slows down the pace

Biggest improvement: Looks like some set up of mystic zombie origin and it's interesting, though some might disconnect at Egypt, that factor didn't turn me off.

Biggest let down: Titus isn't introduced until page 5 and it's the same introduction. No emotional connection with the lead character.
 

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