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The Ministry of Silly Zombies

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1 stars
 
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2 stars
 
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1 stars
 
Character:
1 stars
 
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2 stars
 
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September 03, 2011
This is a comic version of the ZvG story that makes “The Mummy” read like “War and Peace.”

The tone is anarchic, farcical, and over-the-top. It’s silly rather than funny – like “Monty Python” but more so, with a gladiator named “Rick” and a witch doctor named “Dr. Witch.” At least the tone is consistent and integrated with elements from the original script.

With the modern names (like Jonathan and Karter) I thought this could be a “Connecticut Yankee”-type story where a modern character is transported to ancient Rome. This could have been funny, with the joking modern visitor playing off against the gladiator/zombie genre conventions and the ancient straight men, using his modern knowledge (and maybe his knowledge of zombie and gladiator movies) to prevail. But that doesn’t seem to be the author’s intent here.

I didn’t understand what the prologue has to do with the rest of the story, other than to set a general tone of corruption and silliness.

On page 14 I liked the rotting fruit and the description of zombie-fication.

The format is improper and there are multiple writing/English mistakes on many pages.

I only got to page 30 before giving up. The characters are thin and there’s no sense of what’s at stake, which even a comedy needs. This is a difficult read and I think this style would work better in a sketch than in a full-length feature.
 
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Interesting First Five

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3 stars
 
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5 stars
 
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September 01, 2011
I decided to do a review of the first five pages of all the scripts, and come back to the script and do a full review if the first five pages made me want to read it. I decided to start with the scripts that had not already received some reviews.

I read the original script and the Amazon Studio Story Department notes and am using my personal interpretation of what they intended only.

Pros: There's some campy good fun here, and I must say, I'll probably make it back around to read this one for that reason alone. Perhaps this can become the Monty Python version of zombies. Though the dialog doesn't fit the period, it departs with campy humor in mind and delivers more than a few smiles.

Cons: It's formatted more like a stage play and there were a few grammatical errors, too many words slows down the read.

Pros: Titus appears in the first five pages, and he has a bit of personality, though I'm not sure that's exactly what the story department had in mind.

Cons: Even with a campy comedy, it's necessary to connect to the characters and there's no compelling reason to root for anyone, well except for their fashion sense.

It is fun.
 

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