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A Second Round Pick

Overall Recommendation:
3 stars
 
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5 stars
 
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2 stars
 
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2 stars
 
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3 stars
 
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2 stars
 
September 03, 2011
I decided to do a review of the first five pages of all the scripts, and come back to the script and do a full review if the first five pages made me want to read it. I decided to start with the scripts that had not already received some reviews.

I read the original script and the Amazon Studio Story Department notes and am using my personal interpretation of what they intended only.


Pros: Nice writing style, good dialog, tight action/scene description, good character development, starts swith action,

Cons: Doesn't start with the hero. The backstory on the front end at least sets up the mask and it's interesting enough to get away with. If my job was to read a hundred and twenty scripts, I'd put it in pile two, but I'll chalk that up to personal tastes in wanting to engage with the main character right away, as on the screen, the opening could work. The Mummy opens with a compelling backstory.

Rewrite wise, it seems to set up the story and supernatural element of zombies without departing from the original entirely, so that's a plus.
 

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