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Fun Indian Jones clone but could use stronger plot/characters

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September 25, 2011
I thought this was a fun, well written adventure story, but the characters are straight out of central casting and the dialogue is way too on the nose. I would also suggest toning down the violence and amping up the comedy. Maybe make the romance more revolved around innuendo and less explicit too.

With more unique characters, a stronger and more believable villain, and some more interesting puzzles/archaeology this could be a great story. Like I said, the writing is good and easy to follow.
 

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