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500 DAYS - EPISODE ONE OF SIX. Paul's Original Draft (Script 1)

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1 11/22/15

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Started writing about a year ago - big learning curve, but very enjoyable. Like to try my hand at a variety of genres.
 

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ZvG: Zombies Vs Gladiators, J. H.'s 2nd Draft

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Words and more words

Overall Recommendation:
2 stars
 
Premise:
3 stars
 
Story structure:
3 stars
 
Character:
3 stars
 
Dialogue:
1 stars
 
Emotion:
1 stars
 
September 11, 2015
This script is 144/over 150 pages - too long and too wordy. The action scenes need tightening considerably - at the moment faced with large blocks of prose. Shorten them all - less is more.
The dialogue is unconvincing, and again far too wordy - tighten it up or cut, cut, cut. The premise is interesting - I can see the appeal to a mass audience.
 

Favorite Movies

Bladerunner, Gladiator, Casablanca,
 

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