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Coming Home (Short) C.M.'s Original Draft (Script 1)

No rating
- 10/31/14

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Author of ten novels. Find me at www.cm-albrecht.webs.com
 

Reviews C.M. Has Written

Weiss Acres, Dave's 2nd Draft

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Lots of wise acres in Weiss Acres

Overall Recommendation:
5 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
5 stars
 
Character:
5 stars
 
Dialogue:
4 stars
 
Emotion:
5 stars
 
May 03, 2011
I loved this script.

Sonny's accent put me off. Luckily Sonny's comments didn't last long and once I got past that and couldn't stop till I go tto the end. Every character in the script is interesting in his/her own way and I cared about all of them. If I had only one comment, I felt it would be sufficent to mention that Sonny speaks with a heavy Brooklyn/Bronx accent. Maybe it's Jersey too. (To me nearly everybody in the NY area talks like that), but for a scary moment I thought I was going to have to wade through Sonnyspeak all through the script.

I loved the characters, the premise and the fact that everybody has his/her own goals and desires and it all interconnects. The adventures of the ring was a a great story in itself..

Can't wait to see the movie!

If I could write comedy like this, I've give up my life of crime.
 

Minnesota Murder Mystery, Phil's Original Draft

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Foreshadowing

Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
4 stars
 
Character:
4 stars
 
Dialogue:
4 stars
 
Emotion:
4 stars
 
March 24, 2011
Hi Phil. Since you seem to be open to comments, I did have one little problem that nags me: Let's see. I don't want to give away anything here, but without mentioning names, why was an overflowing bag of money left for someone to find?
If I had found it and happened to be a little bit short of cash, I might just snatch the bag and run. But being me, maybe I missed somethng there. I thought the way you foreshadowed certain events very clever. Carl
 

Minnesota Murder Mystery, Phil's 2nd Draft

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I think Nice

Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
No rating
 
Character:
4 stars
 
Dialogue:
5 stars
 
Emotion:
4 stars
 
March 22, 2011
I'm not in a position to be a critic, but considering my age and condition, it's a compliment that I was able to read the entire script at one sitting. Usually I can't get past the first fifteen pages, even when the script sounds promising.
The title spoke to me right away. The premise even spoke more loudly; store security getting involved in a murder.
I liked the pace and the dialogue. I thought the chemistry between Tim and Sheila was good — although I was never quite sure about their relationship until near the end — and if I were a wealthy millionaire movie producer, I think I'd produce this.
Overall I thought the action was clear and easy to follow. Just a little bit predictible, but hey, what isn't? Look at "Tourist" which I just watched. Paint by the numbers for beginners. Unfortunately, Hollywood is less interested in offering high quality entertainment to the public than it is in making a safe, foolproof investment, i.e. a strictly formula flick with big names or a remake of a film that did well the first (or second or third) time out.
If you can't get something like this produced, we're all in big trouble (but you already knew that).
Good luck, Phil!
 

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