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Author, screenwriter, and producer with an MFA in screenwriting. I wrote the novel and feature script for C.B. DeMille: The Man Who Invented Hollywood and wrote and produced Destiny's Lance, an action thriller surrounding the legendary spear of destiny. I have taught screenwriting and film history as a guest lecturer at Mills College, The University of Maryland, and Riverside Community College. I have 8 nonfiction books and a novel published, including Life After Debt, Identity Theft, Credit Secrets, and Grace Period. For more info, look me up on IMDB. Thanks.
 

Reviews Robert Has Written

American Anthem, John's 13th Draft

1 out of 2 people found the following review helpful:

Great American Story

Overall Recommendation:
5 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
5 stars
 
Character:
5 stars
 
Dialogue:
3 stars
 
Emotion:
4 stars
 
April 18, 2011
Great story and characters. More developed than the first draft that I read a couple of months ago. This is a big improvement on bringing the third act together with more emotional satisfaction. Even though I don't follow this particular sport (speed skating), I could imagine the action on the big screen and felt empathy for the characters. This could get marketing help and product placement by working with profesional and amateur speed skating associations, sports equipment manufacturers as well as autism awareness groups.

For marketing to a broad, 4 quadrant audience, I'd eliminate the use of words like "fag", "bitch" and "damn" etc. They don't add any authenticity to the characters or move the story forward, so don't really serve any purpose other than to alienate some audience members.

Otherwise, the movie could appeal to audiences that like Soul Surfer, Rudy, and Radio. Good work!
 

Frame-Up, Taylor's Original Draft

0 out of 2 people found the following review helpful:

Hangover meets Hitchcock

Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
 
Premise:
4 stars
 
Story structure:
4 stars
 
Character:
4 stars
 
Dialogue:
2 stars
 
Emotion:
3 stars
 
March 25, 2011
Great premise and opening hook. Not sure I like the Kari's reaction dialogue to seeing a dead person, "I don't know you. Oh my God. Who are you?" Lot of "on the nose" dialogue. But the story is solid and it moves with a quick pace and surprise twists and turns throughout. Definitely something that could translate well into a low budget thriller with a good demographic reach.
 

The Tavern, Carl's Original Draft

3 out of 4 people found the following review helpful:

Smart contained thriller. Not your grandfather's period piece.

Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
 
Premise:
4 stars
 
Story structure:
5 stars
 
Character:
4 stars
 
Dialogue:
3 stars
 
Emotion:
4 stars
 
March 23, 2011
A dark, contained thriller with good twists and turns. Plenty of action in this period piece. I love the fact that this story is told with only a few characters and a single location that could easily be translated into the stage or the big screen.
 

Destiny's Lance (aka Spear of Destiny), Carl's 1st Draft

2 out of 3 people found the following review helpful:

Brilliant revision!

Overall Recommendation:
5 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
5 stars
 
Character:
5 stars
 
Dialogue:
5 stars
 
Emotion:
5 stars
 
March 23, 2011
Took a good script and made it great! Excellent revision. Streamlined the plot and added depth to the characters. Nice dialogue changes and structural fixes. As the legend says, "Whosoever possesses Destiny's Lance will rule the world!" Look forward to seeing this on the big screen.
 

Reminded, Rob's hi-res version of "Reminded"

1 out of 3 people found the following review helpful:

Memento meets Chinatown

Overall Recommendation:
5 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
5 stars
 
Character:
5 stars
 
Dialogue:
4 stars
 
Emotion:
4 stars
 
March 01, 2011
Great story, reminescent of Memento in style and with a Chinatown tone. Amazing production for a one-man-show. Very inspiring demonstration of what a single storyteller can do with the right tools. I particularly enjoyed the visual effects of the skydiving fall. Wondering if I could pull of something like this myself. Great work! Look forward to seeing this on the big screen.
 

Identity Theft, Dorian's 1st Draft

1 out of 2 people found the following review helpful:

Character driven action thriller

Overall Recommendation:
5 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
5 stars
 
Character:
5 stars
 
Dialogue:
4 stars
 
Emotion:
5 stars
 
February 18, 2011
This revision really changes the character arcs and relationships, making it a much tighter, more character driven action/thriller. The original premise still keeps the action moving at a quick pace, ramping up the stakes and broadening the action sequences. Thanks for giving a fresh take to this powerful concept.
 

Favorite Movies

Citizen Kane, Chinatown, Sunset Boulevard, Blade Runner, Being There, The Matrix, Star Wars Trilogy, Avatar, Inception, The Ten Commandments, Waking Life, West Side Story.
 

Influences

Cecil B. DeMille, Shakespeare, The Bible, Joseph Campbell, Christopher Nolan, Steven Spielberg, James Cameron, George Lucas.
 

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