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Vitreous R. Hunter's Original Draft (Script 1)

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13 06/27/11

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DEAD FOREVER, Michael's Test Movie

0 out of 1 people found the following review helpful:

can't wait to watch the "feature" of this!

Overall Recommendation:
5 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
5 stars
 
Character:
5 stars
 
Dialogue:
5 stars
 
Emotion:
5 stars
 
July 01, 2011
Wow! What a great script, and a great test movie!

I loved the use of full video ONLY for the movie-within-a-movie, and all of the composition of the test movie was very professional; I would be happy watching a feature film of this made by the same cast and crew who made this test movie.

I agree with the other reviewers that the echo-ey voice-overs are kind of distracting; honestly, I don't think the voice-overs are really even necessary and suspect that they'd get cut from the final version of the film. I also think the opening shot of Patrick dead takes away more than it adds, and would probably be cut from the final film.

There were a few places where I thought the pacing was slowed down a little too much by the dialogue; specifically the scene where they're talking during the stakeout, although the conversation at that point also serves the narrative purpose of distracting Patrick from seeing the painter get in his car. Maybe that scene would seem to drag less in full video than it does with the still images.

A couple of minor continuity errors I noticed: Patrick's bullet hole in the opening doesn't match his death at the end, and [SPOILER] Nick is on crutches in the flashback where he's watching from the shadows at the motel when he shouldn't be on crutches yet.

Overall an awesome job and I can't wait to see where this project goes next!
 

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