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About

Went to Cal Arts to study Animation (Film-graphics w/Jules Engle) back when MACs were still B&W. So I got into Live Action; worked for Roger Corman; did a bunch of low-budget films. Got away from the insane hours of working in the Art Department to work as a Location Scout & Site Rep; which has given me time to write on my laptop while I baby-sit Film Crews shooting on Location. I've worked on well over 60 feature films, dozens of TV shows & over 800 TV commercials in the LA area. Done just about everything in Live Action, except Make-up & Hair. Other than that, you name it, I've done it. Over the years I've worked on some really dreadful films (many not on IMDb) and also some huge projects like "Mr. & Mrs. Smith"; "Fun with Dick & Jane" and "XXX-2". Stopped keeping a resume after working on the underwater FX unit on "The Abyss". Sometimes the low budget films got pretty weird. Once "wrangled" over 10,000 cockroaches (three ice chests overflowing with them) for Roger Corman's horror schlock-fest, "The Nest"...... I'd say that pretty much sums up my dedication to the "Art" of Film making.
 

Reviews David Has Written

Artifice Video 1 - Comedy/Satire

5 stars
Clever & intruiging way to sell your story! Having worked in the Corporate Art World before getting into Film, I kept laughing out loud as I wondered about the Faustian repercussions of "the Deal"!
April 12, 2017

LYBARGER ST., Cristina's Original Draft

5 out of 6 people found the following review helpful:

Beware this Author: dropped a review of my work from 5 stars to 1 star because she couldn't accept a constructive suggestion

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August 21, 2012
Well, I was going to give this TWO Stars for effort, but seeing how Christine has a big problem with constructive criticism, ONE Star is being very generous.

After reading 100's of scripts in the last 30+ years; this was the worst & most poorly formatted script I've ever read. Clearly she has never bothered to read any books on writing OR formatting a script correctly. Waste of time; not to mention giving me one star for a script of mine that had only good (4-5 star) reviews. Find that hard to believe? Read the reviews she's written.
 

The Judas Line Video 1 - Teaser #1

5 stars
Has feel & pacing of pro Studio Trailer: quick cuts give a taste of story; sound bites of key characters; VO gives BKG info to build emotional involvement & reveal conflict; Great Artwork! Great Job!
December 31, 2011

Hard Cold Truth, Patrick's Original Draft

2 out of 2 people found the following review helpful:

The opening of Pandora's Box...

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5 stars
 
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December 23, 2011
Hard Cold Truth is an amazing, fascinating & compelling story in which the reader is swept along in the unexpected tsunami of what quickly become earth-shattering and life-threatening events… events which were accidentally unleashed by the rather extraordinary (and most definitely non-traditional) Hero.

Welcome to the clinically sterile & neurotically hygienic world of Dr. Charles “Chuck” Morning… a research scientist who suffers from a variety of issues, among them a phobia of bacteria and what can best be described as less-than-suave social skills.

The opening scenes introducing us to Chuck reminded me of Peter Sellers’ quirky character in “Being There,” but as we quickly get to know Chuck from a voyeur’s perspective, he’s far more than just a brilliant eccentric; he’s a fastidious genius with an unrelenting dedication to his research and accomplishing results to achieve his goal… the cure for the common Cold.

As I read this fascinating & occasionally humorous (as well as sometimes very tragic story), I soon envisioned Chuck in my mind’s eye as being a combination of Russell Crowe’s characters in both “A Beautiful Mind” and also “The Insider.” The dialogue is edgy & terse in a way that reminds me of David Mamet.

There’s a lot going on here… Asimov’s “I am Legend” comes to mind. There’s also a very poetic & lyrical feel in some scenes where the visual-story-telling becomes almost surreal and reminds me of a couple of my favorite Fellini films; moments that are implied in verbal descriptions, but that can only be communicated in film.

In spite of Chuck starting out as being a “bit stiff” emotionally, you can’t help but become involved and enjoy watching him as he slowly grows out of his shell. Under the surface of still waters, these waters run deep.

His chance meeting with a charming little old lady (Ruth) on an airplane; the emotional tugging at his heart in an ER waiting room; during a funeral(s)… these are some of the events that chip away at his hard outer defense mechanism and allow the inner man to slowly come out of his antiseptic realm... and fortunately, for his sake and the redemption of his buried humanity, rekindle the old flames of a love affair that he had extinguished in the past... undoubtedly due to his rigid routines, habits and emotionally-unavailable persona.

But when it looks like the world is speeding toward what appears to be its inevitable end (literally meaning: mankind on the verge of extinction) Chuck’s character arc “spikes” as he goes through an emotional metamorphosis; and blossoms (sorry, won’t give away any plot spoilers here) to a very satisfying conclusion.

“Hard Cold Truth” comes alive with intimate portrayals of engaging characters; a completely unique and eccentric Hero; and all of it set in the midst of a very possible and scary scenario for world-wide disaster (involving the opening of a Pandora’s Box of unrestricted bacteriological and genetic research). I really enjoyed reading this script and think it would make a great film. In fact, it’s so unique and has so much going on, it would easily make a very satisfying novel as well. Great stuff!
 

Herod, Lauri's Original Draft

2 out of 2 people found the following review helpful:

Outstanding Political Thriller & Action Adventure

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5 stars
 
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December 23, 2011
This is truly an amazing, exciting and breathtaking piece of work. I was really blown away by what I read here; exceptional writing, fantastic plot, fascinating characters and extraordinary story-telling of the ruthless & bloody rise to power by one of History’s most unique Rulers.

For those of you unfamiliar with the actual background and time-frame of Herod; imagine if you will the vivid elements and dramatic plot twists of a well-crafted Tom Clancy novel filled with cut-throat political intrigue, espionage and back-stabbing treachery (agents & double agents); but… set amidst the Draconian rule of ancient Rome (as in Ridley Scott’s epic Gladiator).

No… this is NOT a review of Zombies vs Gladiators… (speaking of which, I thought Lauri’s draft (#71) was a brilliant improvement)… This is far more cerebral and emotionally gratifying; and for those readers seeking the clash of swords and a torrential spilling of blood in epic battles… you will most certainly not be disappointed.

This is like opening a Video Time Capsule that thrusts the reader over 2,000 years back in time, and into the midst of an incredible story. Forget all those B-minus Steve Reeves movies and all those mediocre “sword & sandals” flicks made in the early 60’s…

Herod is the extraordinary portrait of a ruthless Political chameleon; a story filled with intense and violent action & adventure that takes place in the backwaters of the Roman Empire, a small colony of little importance to Rome and that is in the midst of its own political struggles as to who the rightful Ruler (and ruling Family) is…

But that all changes when Herod arrives in Rome with a “private” message from Cleopatra for Mark Anthony; and with the clandestine support of the right people, Herod shows the Senate how he can be of service to the Empire, by delivering the Crown Jewel of the ancient trade route between Syria and Egypt (the strategically-placed fortress city of Jerusalem)… into Caesar’s hands.

Still don’t get it? Think Sparticus; Ben Hur; Gladiator; 300… Herod is right up there in the same company. This is an Excellent script and a Fantastic story.
 

FORBIDDEN PLANETS, WILLIAM's Original Draft

1 out of 1 people found the following review helpful:

Going back to explore the mystery of the Krell...

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December 23, 2011
William’s “Forbidden Planets” is Fantastic… Picking right up from the ending scenes of the 1956 Sci-Fi Classic “Forbidden Planet,” (loosely based upon Shakespeare’s play The Tempest) “…Planets” leaps back & forth across the universe as an intergalactic saga that goes from a single planet location to… Well, I don’t want to give away any plot spoilers here… other than to reveal this...

Fans of the original film will recall that the first Explorers of the Forbidden Planet (Altair Four) had discovered evidence under the planet’s barren surface of an ancient and highly-evolved alien civilization… but even more intriguing, a fully-functioning and very bizarre, gargantuan “machine” capable of turning thoughts into physical reality… the astounding legacy of the missing civilization known as the Krell.

At the end of the original film, the Captain and crew of rescue ship C57D have mistakenly concluded that this “machine” has somehow caused the Krell to become extinct; and they’ve also clearly underestimated the extent of the powers of this extraordinary device.

As a result of some rather unexpected “cosmic-sleight-of-hand,” they are ordered back to investigate the mysterious reappearance(?) of Altair Four, even though they had just recently watched the huge planet explode and self-destruct.

Despite some non-traditional formatting, “…Planets” is an incredible Sci-Fi epic with exponentially rising intergalactic stakes at risk; as the very fabric of time and space are being torn apart at the seams by forces and powers far beyond the infantile science of man, or mankind's previous experience or ability to comprehend.

This story dwarfs the threat to Earth (& the Federation) as seen in the first Star Trek film (the “V’iger” anomaly) and opens the door(s) wide open for even further adventures of mankind’s exploration of space by taking unprecedented and huge quantum leaps beyond our galaxy (instantaneous interstellar transporting) now that they’ve peeked into the Pandora’s Box of Krell technology. A fascinating story… an epic adventure... and all the elements in place for a film franchise.
 

Favorite Movies

Film Noir; Sci-Fi/Horror; Extreme-Action; Asian Horror; Foreign; Experimental & Animated Shorts

David Lynch's "The Grandmother" & Chris Marker's "Le Jetee" (animated B&W stills and inspiration for Terry Gilliam's "12 Monkeys")
 

Influences

Gettin' the crap scared outta me in '57 (age 6) when I snuck into the living room @2AM to watch "Invaders from Mars" on our B&W TV! HA! My 1st Sci-Fi film & haven't been the same since! Archaeology, Film Noir, HP Lovecraft and Clark Ashton Smith


 

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